By far, food company should be in charge for customer health. A plethora of junk food manufactured containing quantity of sugar which result in deteriorating customer's health. Therefore, a growing argument that sugary products price must be brought up too motivate people to purchase less sugar contained products which I totally agree.
Firstly, it its undoubtedly that manufactured food and drink consist of large proportion of sugar such as candy, bread, cake, fast-food….Consequently, the customers are at higher risk of having diabetes, obesity, heart disease or any illness associated with affecting detrimentally their well-being. For instance, many researches have indicated that people those usually consume sugary junk food tend to reach higher level of health problems, even lead to some severe illness. Thus, it may put a huge burden on country’s medical, ill residents may work at a lower level of productivity and inactively.
On the other hand, enhancing those product's price will result in less number of purchases, thus, decrease the amount of sugar people consume. This action may convince consumers to purchase cheaper and healthier products. Furthermore, people get used to having sugar-free or low sugar proportion food and consider it as their usual meals. Day by day, these customers raise their awareness of healthy diet and as a result, mankind's being will improve, directly effect the country prosperity.
In conclusion, I think the higher price these sugary products are, the better health the consumers will be. Therefore, increasing sugary food and drink should be taken into action as its advantages will benefit human life significantly.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 253, Rule ID: TOO_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'to motivate'?
Suggestion: to motivate
...ugary products price must be brought up too motivate people to purchase less sugar contained...
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Line 3, column 13, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...s which I totally agree. Firstly, it its undoubtedly that manufactured food and ...
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Line 3, column 138, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Consequently
... such as candy, bread, cake, fast-food….Consequently, the customers are at higher risk of ha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1424.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 258.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.51937984496 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07295660821 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.624031007752 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 434.7 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.1074196831 49.4020404114 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.666666667 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.0 7.06120827912 184% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.359137654066 0.244688304435 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127950936459 0.084324248473 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.068624611356 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.219765564414 0.151304729494 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0738007524755 0.056905535591 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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