Some people think women should be allowed to join the army, the navy and the air force just like men.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer.
In today’s life, the gender balance right has been considered as an important rule, whether women should be allowed to serve in the military has triggered debate. Some people opine that ladies should be allowed to join the army force while others believe that women are not suitable for these kind of job. In my opinion, I partially agree with this notion for some reasons.
Some sate that women are not as strong as men to take a mission on a battlefield, so it is difficult for them being in the military. The army work usually requires strength such as heavy lifting, climb the pass, cross the stream, marching far,… so the women could not do these work. Similarly, if women join in the war, female soldiers can easily have been arrested because of weak physical strength. This is dangerous for their life. Therefore, it must be safe if women do logistic and support male soldiers.
To commence with, women will be a boon to the force. To be clear, the world has realized that women are equally capable as men in both mentally and physical abilities. As women are blessed with intellectual and cognitive skills, they can use these invaluable skills in the force. In addition to this, as we know, women are already serving in the various other physically demanding job sectors such as white collar and blue collar worker. It is unwise to select them in this job sector. Moreover, women are naturally less aggressive and peace makers and these qualities are blessing for the force and once they come to leadership these help to reduce conflict among the nations. Further, women are already part of the police department and they have proved that they are capable of doing adventures and riskier jobs.
History has shown that women are full of performing well in the military. Historically, there are a lot of superwomen whose achievements really put their male to shame. In China, for instance, Mulan is a famous soldier taking army responsibility for her father and has become an example of women’s strength. In Vietnam, since the founding of the country, many heroines have saved the history of book such as Hai ba Trung, Ba Trieu,… until the resistance against the colonialists, many female leader generals lead the army like Nguyen Thi Dinh, Nguyen Thi Minh Khai,…Their determination, courage and dignity, to this day, are still being admired by male soldiers all over the world. This proves that women could succeed on the battlefield. The women also have their love with the motherland, so nobody can bar them from defending their homeland.
In conclusion, while it is true that some defense jobs are more suitable for men, i strongly suggest that women should be allowed to carry out their military duties, which can be a good way to protect the country as well as respect women right.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, moreover, really, similarly, so, still, therefore, well, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as well as, in my opinion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 7.0 414% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 1.00243902439 1097% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 6.8 162% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 3.15609756098 349% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 42.0 5.60731707317 749% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 33.7804878049 151% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2329.0 965.302439024 241% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 481.0 196.424390244 245% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.841995842 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 3.73543355544 125% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50762815461 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 106.607317073 246% => Less unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544698544699 0.547539520022 99% => OK
syllable_count: 730.8 283.868780488 257% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 1.53170731707 457% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.07073170732 467% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 3.36585365854 297% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 8.94146341463 246% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.2095675594 43.030603864 172% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.863636364 112.824112599 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8636363636 22.9334400587 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.77272727273 5.23603664747 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 1.69756097561 471% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 3.70975609756 404% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 1.13902439024 439% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254091433243 0.215688989381 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0770923340435 0.103423049105 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0647564966078 0.0843802449381 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166008952411 0.15604864568 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0676953065479 0.0819641961636 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.2329268293 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 61.2550243902 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 11.4140731707 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 40.7170731707 255% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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