TPO 6
According to the information presented in the reading passage, it can be clearly understood that online encyclopedias have several disadvantages in contrast with traditional one. However, considering the points presented in the listening passage, the lecturer is of the opinion that thanks to some mechanisms which use in online type of encyclopedias, this type is more accurate and reliable.
As for the facts mentioned in the reading passage, the author is persuaded that free accessing and exaggerating some information are the most important disadvantages of online one. According to the reading, contributing to changing or correcting the information by all people, in most cases are not the academic person or person with lack of enough information, cause to the results are not really reliable. On the other hand, the professor points out that online encyclopedias usually are changed by group of special editor, who had high level studies while traditional ones always have different spelling problem which is not easily and fast to correct. Another made point by professor is due to accessing to some special format, which is not changeable in most cases, makes them reliable and also safe from hackers. In addition, some special editors could change the textual. While, the reading passage indicates that the online encyclopedias are always give easy access to all the consumers and this can raise the possibility of hacking.
The speaker convinced that traditional encyclopedias because of space limitation and limitation in number of experts are always concentrate on specific fields or eliminate some parts of important information. While, the reading implies that there is no any limitation is apace and experts in online encyclopedias. Based on the facts mentioned in the reading and listening passage, it can be concluded that online encyclopedias in contrast with traditional encyclopedias, in different opinion, have some problems and advantages.
- An online class compare to a traditional class 70
- app letter 80
- TPO 13 70
- Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle these problems. 60
- No one should ever be denied medical assistance, no matter what his or her financial situation. 70
flaws:
A wrong format.
The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Don't need to reiterate the contents of reading passages a lot but put more content from the lecture.
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 12
No. of Words: 304 250
No. of Characters: 1630 1200
No. of Different Words: 144 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.176 4.2
Average Word Length: 5.362 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.994 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 128 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 102 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.636 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.337 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.909 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.417 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.562 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.119 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4