In the modern time, there are some countries around the world have more young people than older people in their demographic. While there are some drawbacks for having more young adults than old people. I would argue it is primarily beneficial.
On the one hand, there is a disadvantage for having more young adults. They are not as experience as older people. Many of young peole after finishing their degrees or certificates from their respective university or vocational school, and started working in lower division of an organization or a company. This is because they have not work in a real environment that required many years of experience. Hence, many companies have to train them so that they are fit for the job which cost some of the company resources to do.
However, I would argue that the merits are more significant than such drawbacks. Firstly, it will increase the economy of those countries. Many young adults are still able to work since their physical health has not detiriorate due to old age yet, which means they can work to generate incomes for themselves and pay taxes. As a result, their country economy will rise. Secondly, young people are more capable to defend their country than the elder. Young adults physical ability are much more than older people in catagories such as strength, endurance, and vigor. Military has a strict training routine to increase and reinforce those capabilities that the elder might not be suitable. Thus, older people are not fit to be the frontline of their country defend. For instance, military commonly recruit people from the age of 20 to 35 and avoid the age of 40, this is because humans physical capabilities have detiriorated a lot after the age of 35.
In conclusion, I would argue that it will more beneficial to have more young people than older people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1521.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 311.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89067524116 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58634055638 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488745980707 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 488.7 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.5355300341 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.5 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2777777778 20.7667163134 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05555555556 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151985575308 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0546717454171 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0506808495035 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107094407118 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0523644868211 0.056905535591 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.0946893788 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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