From my own perspective, I agree with the statement that modern people are more likely to help strangers who are in need than ever. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will illuminate in the following essay.
To begin with, with the improvement of average living conditions, the number of people who can help others without sacrificing their own lives is increasing. Most people in the past had low-quality lives. Since there were rare employment opportunities that could offer a decent salary, most families were dependent on farming or hunting. In contrast, with the development of social productivity, more and more people could obtain jobs offering a generous salary, which makes it possible that they could afford to help the poor. My experience is a compelling example of it. I participated in a bunch of volunteering activities during my college years. Since I was a computer science student, it was easy for me to find a part-time job. And I could earn scholarships because of my excellent academic performance. As a result, I was not worried about my own life so that it seemed no reason for me to refuse to help strangers. I donated thousands of money and clothes to remote village districts in China.
Secondly, with the proliferation of the Internet, it is more likely for people to help others. I do not believe current people are superior to people in the past. People did not help others because they did not know they were in need at all or because they did not know how to offer assistance. On the other hand, modern people could easily know there are lots of human-beings urge some help via the great Internet. Besides, the invention of online payment removes the barrier that restricts people from offering their hands. For instance, I found a young girl who had a really bad disease on the Internet. Fortunately, she was in the early stage of that illness. The only difficulty in front of her family was they could not afford the surgery fee. However, because of a donation system that provides online payment, at least ten thousand people, including me, donated money to this poor little girl. I am certain she has already been away from the pain of disease and led a happy life with the help of the Internet. Therefore I strongly believe it is the advent of technology that enables people to offer more assistance than people did in the past.
In conclusion, I wholeheartedly support the opinion that people are more willing to help others than they were in the past due to their carefree personal life and the invention of the Internet.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1019, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...ppy life with the help of the Internet. Therefore I strongly believe it is the advent of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, at least, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2128.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 446.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77130044843 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69647710153 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497757847534 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 677.7 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.091821693 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.6666666667 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5833333333 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.418625199328 0.236089414692 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108063308338 0.076458572812 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0961535135719 0.0737576698707 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.272700252858 0.150856017488 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0587810563748 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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