Part 3: Virtual life on social media has become a parallel one with equal importance to the life in reality. What causes the phenomenon and is this a positive change?
Write an essay of about 350 words to support your opinion and support yout answer with relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience
The existence of the Internet, alongside advancements made throughout history as a whole have shifted the way humans live their lives in quite a dramatic fashion. Now more than ever, emphasis is put on social media and its value, some individuals even reckoned that it rivals with that of real life. And despite the speckles of favorable traits which are founded, ultimately, it is not in the interest of the mass, to this I will divulge further in my essay.
Social media, being the buzzword as it is, has received many praisings over the years, thanks to its profound comfortness and convenience. More particularly, the platforms there provide people with tools to heighten connectedness at a level never seen before. Though as incredible as the trait before is, there are still more that social media provide, chiefly, the control over how one is portrayed. It is the ability to project whatever one wants to their social media page, so as to construct an image of them that they consider is their best version, that really show the attractiveness of the platform. However, such glitz and glamour hides the authentic ugliness that people usually avoid of real life, consequently conjuring up a fake façade many strive for. How unwise would one be to underestimate the power of social media in altering society’s mindset.
As can be inferred from my tone in the preceding paragraph, I do not align myself with the advocates for the growing influence of social media. Relying on something so easily fabricated, and by nature completely manipulatable, does not seem to be the best of ideas, at least that is in my honest opinion. It is quite disheartening to see the trend of virtualization infiltrates our lifestyles and viewpoint, amongst other aspects. In retrospect, one would probably not be able to predict the rapid growth of social media, much less their ability to resist its allure. Nevertheless, it is in my stoic belief, and hopefully others too, that social media will and should never be able to compete with real life.
In conclusion, people are not too far off their mind when they enjoy what social media has to offer. And while it is unfair to regard implementing social media as a step in the wrong direction, it surely is not something our society should be working towards majorly acclimating to.
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- Part 3 Virtual life on social media has become a parallel one with equal importance to the life in reality What causes the phenomenon and is this a positive change Write an essay of about 350 words to support your opinion and support yout answer with rele 84
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 478, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, however, if, nevertheless, really, so, still, then, while, as to, at least, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1935.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 393.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92366412214 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7867045086 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 176.041082164 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575063613232 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 612.9 506.74238477 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.5515418573 49.4020404114 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 120.9375 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5625 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4375 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179338994747 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0584966218185 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0345427608769 0.0667982634062 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106061215939 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0229393786291 0.056905535591 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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