integrated writing about decline in birds' population
The passage asserts that human population is integral factor for decreasing the birds' growth and provided three reasons of support. The professor disavows this point and says that this passage claim is unconvincing and rejects all reasons of article.
First, the article states that human destroy bird habitat, since they build new construction. The lecturer, on the contrary, disaproves this point by explaining that the urban areas are unpleasant for some types of bird, but they are suitable places for other ones, since those places make a better and larger areas for other types. She avers that urban areas have created numerous places for some birds such as: pigeon and seagul, whereas those areas lead to shrink in other types populatin.
Second, the bird habitant are converted to agricultural lands, according to reading. The professor debunks this point by saying that the passage assume is not correct, since in the United States less lands are changed to agricultural use. This results in presenting new high productive crops which provide food for more units, since there is no need to destroy lands for farming.
Third, the article claims that chemical pesticides used in agriculture lead to decline in bird population, since they kill birds or even lower their reprocuction rates. The professor repudiates this idea by explaining that two changes are provided which present less toxic pesticided and try to grow pest-resistant crops. These crops and products have no dangerous chemical for birds, since they no longer birds at all.
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is integral factor
is an integral factor
this passage claim is unconvincing
this passage's claim is unconvincing
this claim in the passage is unconvincing
Sentence: First, the article states that human destroy bird habitat, since they build new construction.
Description: An adjective is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to human and destroy
the passage assume
the passage's assume
two changes are provided which present less toxic pesticided
two changes are provided to present less toxic pesticided
since they no longer birds at all.
since they are no longer birds at all.
Sentence: The lecturer, on the contrary, disaproves this point by explaining that the urban areas are unpleasant for some types of bird, but they are suitable places for other ones, since those places make a better and larger areas for other types.
Error: disaproves Suggestion: disapproves
Sentence: She avers that urban areas have created numerous places for some birds such as: pigeon and seagul, whereas those areas lead to shrink in other types populatin.
Error: seagul Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: populatin Suggestion: population
Sentence: Second, the bird habitant are converted to agricultural lands, according to reading.
Error: habitant Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Third, the article claims that chemical pesticides used in agriculture lead to decline in bird population, since they kill birds or even lower their reprocuction rates.
Error: reprocuction Suggestion: reproduction
Sentence: The professor repudiates this idea by explaining that two changes are provided which present less toxic pesticided and try to grow pest-resistant crops.
Error: pesticided Suggestion: No alternate word
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 11 12
No. of Words: 249 250
No. of Characters: 1269 1200
No. of Different Words: 138 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.972 4.2
Average Word Length: 5.096 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.449 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 82 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 64 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 38 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 26 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.636 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.511 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.455 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.373 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.639 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.101 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4