People are bombarded with advertisements in everyday life. Many people have different opinions about advertising. prompt asserts that young children should not be exposed to commercials. I strongly disagree with this notion for two reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the following paragraphs.
First of all, I see nothing wrong with promotions if they are prepared correctly. What do I mean when I say correctly? If there are no sexual or unwanted scenes or elements in the advertisement, there should not be any problem. In my opinion, there are government regulatory agencies that control advertisements in all sectors. Thus, if there is something wrong with the promotion, it won't be published. In addition, because children usually watch child channels and their commercials are mostly designed for young children's interests, there seems no harm for children.
Secondly, no one can deny that children spend most of their time watching cartoons, etc. According to the latest research, it is useful for improving their imagination. In order to continue showing that kind of content, channels need advertising revenues. It is also beneficial for companies. If you are a company that produces toys, your major target group is children. Drawing from my own experience, it is a really useful method that works very well. For instance, when my little brother was a child and watching this kind of TV channel, he really paid attention to the commercials that he saw on the TV. Almost every day, he came and asked my parents to buy him a new toy that he had just seen on TV. Of course, I do admit that it can hurt families' budgets, but for the reasons I stated above, channels should display commercials.
In light of the reasons mentioned, I strongly believe that television advertising aimed at children should be allowed.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 115, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Prompt
...e different opinions about advertising. prompt asserts that young children should not ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for instance, i mean, in addition, kind of, of course, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 52.1666666667 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1534.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 303.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06270627063 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87175748205 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.610561056106 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 459.9 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.1841453107 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.7 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.15 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163165366181 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0471106994676 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0595709413614 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128340090515 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.058262714977 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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