Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
How to educate children is an important question that needs to be addressed properly for the sake of providing a better future for them. And comparing the present with the past, some think that it is more difficult today to educate children since they spend most of the time on the Internet: cell phones, online games, and social networking Web site. Personally, I disagree because the Internet is a great source for their education, and more parents possess high education which would facilitate this task.
To begin with, the Internet has become an essential part of people's daily life, some use it for leisure while others use it for learning. And parents, aware of the fact that children belong to the former group, could take advantage of this dependence as an incentive to induce them to become the latter group. For example, my cousins restrain their ten-year-old son the time he can surf on the Internet for noneducational purposes such as playing games or another activity to one hour per week. And if the kid in exchange has to watch three or four didactic videos like learning an English song. Because of being aware of the kid's biggest motivation, it is actually easier to educate him.
Moreover, nowadays the vast majority of parents attended school or higher education which makes it less a problem to educate their children properly even if they are distracted by electronic devices. More informed parents can easily convince their children about the dangers of using such devices or activities and illustrate how important is the education. For instance, one of my college professors told us that he explained to his daughter that a kidnapper could contact her through social media pages, she was no longer that eager to connect to those websites.
In short, every child could have some vices and whatever they are, parents should be aware of them so as to take advantage of them in better educate the child.
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Hey, I got confused with this
Hey, I got confused with this question. And after getting your rating, I tried to Google some sample answers. What do you think about this one? Many thanks in advance.
"Education is a fundamental part of everyone's life. It helps us to thrive and prosper our lives. Somepeople feel that educating children is more difficult task than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking web site. However, I do not agree with them, and feel that teaching children has become east than it was in the past. I feel this way because cell phones have helped students in their study subjects, online games have taught students topics clearly, and social networking web sites have inspired students to study hard.
To begin with, students can get many information about different fields using cellphones. They can google the term they do not understand while studying on their cell phone. They do not have to wait for their professors. I agree that students spend so much time on cell phones, but it does not mean that they are not learning. Cellphones can help them many ways in their studing. For example, I always use my cell phone to get more information about the topic the professor is going to teach. This actually helps me to understand the topic clearly. Thus, cellphones can help students while studying.
In addition, online games have changed education in many positive ways. For example, there are many education games, which help students to learn the topic along with having fun. For example, when I was learning English, I uesd to play a vocablary quize online. This quize game helped me a lot to memorize new words. When I told my English professor about this game, he actually encouraged students in his class to play this game. Thus, this game helped many students studying new english world and made it is easy for the professor to teach new words.
Last but not least, social networking websites give students incentives to study. I agree that kids spend so much time on these sites. However, these sites can help students learn many things. Students can make groups on these sites according to their interests. For instance, when I came to the United States, I did not know anything about the admission process for a dental school. Then, I joined a group of foreign students on Facebook. This had helped me not only to understand the process but also to study the subjects for the board test. I got motivated to study hard after joining the group. Thus, social networking sites help students in many ways while studying, and this makes it easy for teachers to educate students.
To sum it up, eventhough some people feel that the advancement in technology has made it difficult to educate children, I do not agree with them. I believe that educating kids has become esay than it was in the past because children have become smarter with the use of cell phones, online games, and social networking sites."
The essay topic is 'Educating
The essay topic is 'Educating children', it is not 'Educating students'. So the examples are not used properly.
And if the kid in exchange has to watch three or four didactic videos like learning an English song.
Description: can you complete this sentence? this is a clause.
a kidnapper could contact her through social media pages, she was no longer that eager to connect to those websites.
Description: there are two sentences.
flaws:
The conclusion is not related to the topic:
'In short, every child could have some vices and whatever they are, parents should be aware of them so as to take advantage of them in better educate the child.'
Some comparisons wanted to the past education from the third paragraph.
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