The article and the lecture are both about the attempt to raise tuna by farming them in ocean cages. While the write raises some concerns towards this attempt, the speaker states some promising methods that can be applied in tuna farming.
First, despite agreeing that female tuna do not naturally lay eggs in captivity, the lecturer also introduces a scientific breakthrough that can help tackle this problem. By injecting special hormones into the captured females, tuna farmers can soon have them lay eggs to replace the tuna that are sold without having to keep catching young wild tuna. These hormones are already proved not causing harm to either the tuna or consumers later on. As a result, they will help eliminate the decrease in the number of wild tuna populations.
Second, it is true that tuna depend on high-protein food, yet it does not necessarily have to be deprived from other fish. In fact, tuna can also feed on plant-based food that is not only inexpensive but also as nutritious and high in protein as the fish type. Consequently, farmers can keep the cost of farm-raised tuna low while still gaining profits.
Third, as regard to the criticism that caged tuna are easily affected by parasites that caused the infestations of blood flukes, the lecturer claims there's already some steps that can be taken in order to treat them. He gives an example of the tuna getting infected with blood flukes. Scientist have found out these parasites only thrive near the sea shore, thus the problem of blood flukes can be solved simply by locate the tuna cages farther off-shore, in the deeper water.
- TPO 54 Integrated Writing Salinity in Salton Sea 80
- TPO 45 independent writing taskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement In the past young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives Use s 73
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 85
- TPO 65 Nowadays many high schools and universities require students to work on projects in groups and all members of the group receive the same grade mark on the project Do you agree or disagree that giving every member of a group the same grade is a good 90
- TOEFL T P O 2 Integrated Writing Task 52
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 108, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...a by farming them in ocean cages. While the write raises some concerns towards this attem...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 150, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
...ns of blood flukes, the lecturer claims theres already some steps that can be taken in...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, second, so, still, third, thus, while, in fact, as a result, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 22.412803532 89% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 5.01324503311 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1344.0 1373.03311258 98% => OK
No of words: 274.0 270.72406181 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90510948905 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42457756649 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 145.348785872 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.613138686131 0.540411800872 113% => OK
syllable_count: 417.6 419.366225166 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.3134147417 49.2860985944 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.0 110.228320801 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8333333333 21.698381199 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.91666666667 7.06452816374 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.588041133239 0.272083759551 216% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.226283935456 0.0996497079465 227% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0807472608945 0.0662205650399 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.344850847495 0.162205337803 213% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0887471322687 0.0443174109184 200% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.3589403974 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 53.8541721854 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.2367328918 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.42419426049 109% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 63.6247240618 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 108, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...a by farming them in ocean cages. While the write raises some concerns towards this attem...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 150, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
...ns of blood flukes, the lecturer claims theres already some steps that can be taken in...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, second, so, still, third, thus, while, in fact, as a result, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 22.412803532 89% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 30.3222958057 119% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 5.01324503311 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1344.0 1373.03311258 98% => OK
No of words: 274.0 270.72406181 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90510948905 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42457756649 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 145.348785872 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.613138686131 0.540411800872 113% => OK
syllable_count: 417.6 419.366225166 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.23620309051 49% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.3134147417 49.2860985944 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.0 110.228320801 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8333333333 21.698381199 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.91666666667 7.06452816374 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.588041133239 0.272083759551 216% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.226283935456 0.0996497079465 227% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0807472608945 0.0662205650399 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.344850847495 0.162205337803 213% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0887471322687 0.0443174109184 200% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.3589403974 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 53.8541721854 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.2367328918 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.42419426049 109% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 63.6247240618 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.