In the fast-paced flow of the modern world, modern parents seem to get occupied with work more than ever. This makes the time parents are able to spend with their kids become more and more valuable, thus should be used wisely. Although some parents thinks helping their children with their schoolwork is what they should in those free time, I strongly believe having fun together will be more beneficial for the whole family.
First, there is no doubt playing together helps create and strengthen the bond within family members. When parents are too busy to spend sufficient time with their children on a daily basis, their precious scarce family time should be turned into quality family moments. Just by doing simple activities together, such as playing games or sports, the family can create a myriad of happy memories in which parents completely forget about the complicated world out there, and their children get the feeling that their family is cheerful and loving. On the contrary, if family time is made a tutoring session, it is likely that all both parents and the kids get in return is distress and frustration since parents could hardly catch up with the school's ever-changing syllabus in such little time. This task should rather be assigned to a real tutor and not parents unless they want to leave an impression as a rigid tutor and not a caring parent in their son or daughter's mind .
Second, by choosing to play sports or other games with their children in their leisure time, parents are bringing good health benefits to their family as a whole. It is safe to say nowadays, busy grown-ups don't even have time to think about self-care, not to mention the vital importance of doing exercises. Their children, consequently, without the guide from mom and dad, are more susceptible to physical and mental illnesses due to the lack of exercise and outdoor experience. If parents make family commitments and devote their time off-work to such activities, they and the children can be mutually motivated to do what is good for the health. For example, if parents promise their children to run together in the park on Sunday mornings, the kids will get excited to run with mom and dad, which in turn encourages parents to keep their words. As a result, the family can together build healthy bodies and minds through a variety of activities ranging from playing wholesome games and doing different kind of sports.
In the end, parents are the ones to build and guide the family towards the best, so they should know what is better when it comes to choosing an approach to spend their valuable time with their kids. If I were a parent, I would definitely choose take my children out for some play together, considering the great benefits that will bring to my family closeness and well-being.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 973, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ng parent in their son or daughters mind . Second, by choosing to play sports o...
^^
Line 5, column 207, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...is safe to say nowadays, busy grown-ups dont even have time to think about self-care...
^^^^
Line 7, column 247, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to take'
Suggestion: to take
...ere a parent, I would definitely choose take my children out for some play together,...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, second, so, then, thus, well, for example, kind of, no doubt, such as, as a result, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2330.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 481.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84407484407 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41727867036 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507276507277 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 695.7 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 44.1573889627 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.625 100.406767564 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.0625 20.6045352989 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.75 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.371166542499 0.236089414692 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128748470617 0.076458572812 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0738985677628 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.231832837853 0.150856017488 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0399912272813 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.95 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 973, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ng parent in their son or daughters mind . Second, by choosing to play sports o...
^^
Line 5, column 207, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...is safe to say nowadays, busy grown-ups dont even have time to think about self-care...
^^^^
Line 7, column 247, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to take'
Suggestion: to take
...ere a parent, I would definitely choose take my children out for some play together,...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, second, so, then, thus, well, for example, kind of, no doubt, such as, as a result, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2330.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 481.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84407484407 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41727867036 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507276507277 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 695.7 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 44.1573889627 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.625 100.406767564 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.0625 20.6045352989 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.75 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.371166542499 0.236089414692 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128748470617 0.076458572812 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0738985677628 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.231832837853 0.150856017488 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0399912272813 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.95 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.