Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment, and not enough time on more serious duties and obligations.
Most people in the world pay attension to their personal intrests to a certain degree. It is an essential thing to feel their humanity. However, I believe that people today spend too much time on personal intrests, and not enough time on more serious duties and obligations. There are several reasons why I feel this way, which I am going to explain in the following essay.
To begin with, urbanization and high level of technology and internet these days make a huge distraction for people. In addition to that, there are a lot of joy in following up with them, such as scrolling on facebook, playing games, and even being addicted to what is new in the technology field. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. In 2021, I moved out my city, and came to the United States to get my pharmacy degree. I took the first test in the same year, and I was supposed to take the next one after few months. Unfortunatly, I did not. The particular reason for that is that I am not ready to pass it. I spent two years scrolling videos on instagram and facebook without noticing that I am losing doing nothing. Despite that it was fun to watch all those videos, but still I could lose my chance to be a pharmacist. This month, I am plannin to retain my consciousness, and be more serious about my duties to get my degree.
Second, human by nature has high ability to forget what is crucial to be done, and only remember what makes him happy and glade. Consequantly, people in generl will only spend their time on their personal intrest, unless they have a determind personality that will make them focus on their serious duties to servive in this world. For instance, back to my degree example. I have never forgot to go out with my friend or eat an expensive meal in a new resturant. I alwayes have time to try a new thing, but never have an hour to memorize some of my books. I have never missed a new update on the playstation, but I need an every day reminder for the reason of my movement to the United States. In response, I decided to write down what i have to do, and at least for the first month, I will call a reliable friend to remind me every day that I have obligations, and I will lose many opportunities if I kept forgetting that.
To sum up evrything has been stated so far, I will say that people spend more time on personal intrest instead of more serious duties for many reasons. It is not only because of the world urbanization, but also the human nature and their tendency to forget play an important role in that.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 90, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ersonal intrests to a certain degree. It is an essential thing to feel their huma...
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Line 2, column 387, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... this. In 2021, I moved out my city, and came to the United States to get my phar...
^^
Line 3, column 385, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'forgotten'.
Suggestion: forgotten
...back to my degree example. I have never forgot to go out with my friend or eat an expe...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 555, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...e an hour to memorize some of my books. I have never missed a new update on the p...
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Line 3, column 619, Rule ID: ANINFOR_EVERY_DAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'an everyday'?
Suggestion: an everyday
...w update on the playstation, but I need an every day reminder for the reason of my movement ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, still, at least, for instance, i feel, in addition, such as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2071.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 472.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.38771186441 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54061291484 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512711864407 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 665.1 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 12.0 1.86738351254 643% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.84735686 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.0434782609 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5217391304 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5652173913 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217136807252 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0598786219529 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115991601344 0.0737576698707 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168645026236 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102681271476 0.0645574589148 159% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.18 10.9000537634 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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