The extended family is less important now than it was in the past.
There is no shortage of opinions about extended and nuclear families. Nowadays, extended family is more valued in my country and other Asian countries. In my opinion, I disagree that the joint family is less important today than in the past. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, in extended family, we have bonding relationships with many members. Children learn respect for all elders, as seen in the extended family. Children grow up in relationships such as cousin-cousin, brother-brother, uncle-nephew, grandparent-grandchildren, etc. Extended families have multiple benefits, one of which is sharing financial household expenses. For example, I grew up in an extended family. When I was a child, my uncle's business was in trouble. My father helped my uncle start a business. Nowadays, my uncle always tells me that my father really did help in a hard time. As clearly seen, in a hard time, only family can help, extended family can also help bonding relationships grow.
In addition, children grow up better in extended families. These days, parents have jobs and a hectic life. Grandparents support in raising their children. For instance, I grew up with my grandmother and grandfather. They told me narrative moral stories during my sleeping time, when my parents had a job and came home late at night. Children need warm love from their parents, when they are busy with their jobs. Grandparents with children have a warm bond. As a result, the extended family's ease of raising children.
In conclusion, I strongly believe the extended family is more important than it was in the past. Family members help in dilemmas, and children grow up well with grandparents.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, really, so, well, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1467.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 289.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07612456747 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12133742697 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.557093425606 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 439.2 618.680645161 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 22.9715859665 48.9658058833 47% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 63.7826086957 100.406767564 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.5652173913 20.6045352989 61% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.13043478261 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26344379639 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0858426412383 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125887252054 0.0737576698707 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213323590935 0.150856017488 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125092219379 0.0645574589148 194% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 11.7677419355 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.76 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.3 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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