The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy

The pie charts indicate energy consumption in an average Australian household and the greenhouse gas emissions for each this energy use.
It is cleared that, total amount of heating energy and water heating energy is used as main energy in each household in Australia. However, the greenhouse gas emissions for each energy is quite different from the percentage of used energy.
On the one hand, heating energy takes up 42%, which is used the most in every household but the greenhouse gas emissions of heating accounts for only 15%, it is very low to compare the amount of energy is used. It means that heating energy is extremely friendly for environment. Besides, water heating energy makes up 30% of whole used energy, and the greenhouse emissions of them comprises 32%.
On the other hand, cooling and the emissions of this energy do not have much differences, they are all approximately 2-3%. Lightning and refrigeration energy have the emissions doubled than used. Moreover, other appliances emissions take up 28% while these energies are used make up merely 15%

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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS Academic

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 73, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...he emissions of this energy do not have much differences, they are all approximately...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, however, if, moreover, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 19.0 33.7804878049 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 896.0 965.302439024 93% => OK
No of words: 177.0 196.424390244 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06214689266 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64748333727 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67955089105 2.65546596893 101% => OK
Unique words: 95.0 106.607317073 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536723163842 0.547539520022 98% => OK
syllable_count: 288.9 283.868780488 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.7327491879 43.030603864 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.5555555556 112.824112599 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6666666667 22.9334400587 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.77777777778 5.23603664747 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 3.70975609756 243% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.382883043927 0.215688989381 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.18691734068 0.103423049105 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118961391642 0.0843802449381 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.288622942667 0.15604864568 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.12367748098 0.0819641961636 151% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.2329268293 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 61.2550243902 85% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 11.4140731707 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.4329268293 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 73, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...he emissions of this energy do not have much differences, they are all approximately...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, however, if, moreover, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 19.0 33.7804878049 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 896.0 965.302439024 93% => OK
No of words: 177.0 196.424390244 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06214689266 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64748333727 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67955089105 2.65546596893 101% => OK
Unique words: 95.0 106.607317073 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536723163842 0.547539520022 98% => OK
syllable_count: 288.9 283.868780488 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.7327491879 43.030603864 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.5555555556 112.824112599 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6666666667 22.9334400587 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.77777777778 5.23603664747 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 3.70975609756 243% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.382883043927 0.215688989381 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.18691734068 0.103423049105 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118961391642 0.0843802449381 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.288622942667 0.15604864568 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.12367748098 0.0819641961636 151% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.2329268293 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 61.2550243902 85% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 11.4140731707 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.4329268293 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.