Integrated writing
The reading passage is about the advantages of a plan for construction to develop a piece of land in downtown near a lake by doing some constructions. However, the lecturer is opponent to such plan due to some reasons.
The first thing is that although constructing buildings in that area will attract some individuals for accommodation, but will disrupt the beautiful view of lake. As the mentioned land is a common wealth for all citizens, it is more reasonable to transform it to a park. In this way, not only the natural view of the place will be preserved, but also people will be attracted to the park and everybody can enjoy it.
The second thing is that in contrary to the passage that claims the construction will improve the accommodation problems of hundreds of city residents, the lecturer assets that the apartments will be very expensive and only upper-class citizens will afford those condominiums. Thus, the workers who may find a job in planned business units and shops will not be able to live there.
The third and last reason the lecturer provides is that the only enthusiasts for the city council plan is building constructors and real estates that may be benefited directly from constructions. However, it is not justified to destroy the environment and resident wild life for the benefit of just a few people. The main objective of developing the land between lake and bay should be enhancing the green space of the city not making profit for a limited number of citizens.
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Comments
The lecturer reasons against
The lecturer reasons against the city council proposal for reconstruction. The construction claims to improve the area and attract people to the downtown, provide hundreds of accommodations, and create new job opportunities. However, the lecturer refutes all the mentioned claims via the following arguments.
First of all, the constructions will ruin the view of the lake, which belongs to everybody. On the other hand a park can serve all the visitors and the local. Thus, the lecturer believes that making a park between the lake and bay will be a more reasonable decision. This opposes that the plan will make the place attractive and enjoyable for all people.
Secondly, although the housings offered by the plan will accommodate a significant number of dwellers, they are too expensive for lower-class people. Thus, the workers who are to be working at the downtown shops cannot afford them. This undermines the plan's claim for resolving the city's need for new residential.
Finally, the constructions will damage the natural habitat of the place by cutting a considerable number of trees. Therefore, it costs a lot to the environment while filling the pockets of the constructors. This rejects that the development plan can economically be beneficial to the whole city.
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 26 in 30
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 9
No. of Words: 257 250
No. of Characters: 1218 900
No. of Different Words: 136 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.004 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.739 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.78 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 79 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 66 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 47 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.7 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.524 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.353 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.636 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.034 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4