The following graph reveals the information in England economy where farming,manufacturing,business and financial services are divided in couples of sectors in twentieth century.
It can be clearly seen that,overall trend depict about the contribution of different sectors from 19's to 20's.In the case of agriculture 1950 had highest 52 percentum followed by 1900,1975 and 2000 with 49,11 and 3 proportion respectively.In addition,for manufacturing 1900 led with highest position with 44 percent .Whereas,1950,1975 and 2000 occupied 2,3 and 4 percent position respectively.
Turning to the rest of description,Business and financial accounted for 10,22 and 32 proportion respectively over a given period.Beside this in Business and financial 1900 led with lowest position with 3 percent data.As far as comparison is concerned,in 1960 people are more likely to spent on agriculture rather then another.
It is therefore clear that,in starting years the sector of farming and manufacturing had contributed more in Uk economy . Whereas,in last years,business and financial had contributed more the other sector in England.
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overall trend depict about the contribution of different sectors
overall, the trend depicts about the contribution of different sectors
In the case of agriculture 1950 had highest 52 percentum
In the case of agriculture in 1950, it had the highest 52 percentum
for manufacturing 1900 led with highest position
for manufacturing in1900 it led with highest position
Sentence: in 1960 people are more likely to spent on agriculture rather then another.
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had contributed more the other sector in England.
had contributed more to the other sectors in England.
Sentence: It can be clearly seen that,overall trend depict about the contribution of different sectors from 19's to 20's.In the case of agriculture 1950 had highest 52 percentum followed by 1900,1975 and 2000 with 49,11 and 3 proportion respectively.In addition,for manufacturing 1900 led with highest position with 44 percent .Whereas,1950,1975 and 2000 occupied 2,3 and 4 percent position respectively.
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