Modern children are suffering from the diseases that were once considered to be meant for adults only. Obesity is a major disease prevalent among children. what are causes and what solution can be offered?
Nowadays, the increasing rate of overweight children and adults is a worldwide health issue and it is spreading in every corner of street. Obesity is one of the major problem which is growing rapidly in school going children that observed for teenagers. Here, i would like to an account for its reasons and solutions.
There are manifold point to explain it causes. First and foremost, fast foods are the primary reason for overweighing as it consist of excess of fats and carbohydrates. To explain, it is often seen that children are fond of pizzas, burgers, noodles and so on that are easily available to them in school canteens and put negative effects on their health. Hence, imbalance diet make them like a couch potato and even sometime laughing stock. In addition, in this modern era, mostly parents are busy to earn their bread and butter and they do not have time to cook at home. Therefore, they prefer to buy meal from restaurants instead of making food at home and give rise to lots of health issues. As a result, less parental care as well as calorie rich diet is the secondary reason to making children obese.
Further emphasizing on my point of view. Sedentry life style are also responsible for making children fatty and unhealthy. To explain, technology blessed us with lots of advancement specially in term of computers and games and it has curtailed the level of physical activity in this specific age of group. As a result, passion towards indoor games has reduce the manual work and give rise to enormous heath problems.
Numerous points to solve this problem. Initially, school as well as parents should take care of eating habits of school going children. To explain, children should be teach to cook healthy food for themselves and banning junk food and fizzy drinks in school. Along with this, parents must cook healthy food for their children that will be hygenic and nutritious for them so that they can relish healthy lifestyle. Consequently, it is moral duty of guardians same as teachers to guide upcoming generation about balance diet. what is more, children should be more encouraged towards outdoor activity so that they stay fit and healthy.
To recapitulate, it is indeed true that main causes of obesity are unhealthy eating and not enough physical activities. This aliment can be prevented and treated by healthy eating as well as outdoor activities.
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
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Verbs: 0.152808988764 0.15552993741 98% => OK
Adjectives: 0.105617977528 0.0946569551029 112% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0606741573034 0.0501201869031 121% => OK
Pronouns: 0.047191011236 0.0437536398559 108% => OK
Prepositions: 0.125842696629 0.122223957237 103% => OK
Participles: 0.0404494382022 0.0403219363162 100% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.56405059532 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0359550561798 0.0326786765898 110% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0404494382022 0.0861751148067 47% => More determiners wanted.
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0179775280899 0.0214082191602 84% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00898876404494 0.0119246538136 75% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2471.0 1933.38276553 128% => OK
No of words: 404.0 316.052104208 128% => OK
Chars per words: 6.1012345679 6.10592293882 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.20519365927 107% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.373762376238 0.37474360046 100% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.274752475248 0.284197041944 97% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.173267326733 0.203843217982 85% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0965346534653 0.137313986986 70% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56405059532 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 176.041082164 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561881188119 0.560935902166 100% => OK
Word variations: 65.4339008611 60.7401812628 108% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0911823647 137% => OK
Sentence length: 18.3636363636 20.7725350517 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.000556258 49.5273876611 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.610328638 93.4120437189 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8638497653 15.2821509519 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.774647887324 0.594174754866 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.39078156313 114% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.01102204409 259% => Too many language errors. Double check essay format, grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 45.8388838884 49.1922392462 93% => OK
Elegance: 1.63793103448 1.69127372897 97% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Topic essay coherence: 0.296611572484 0.332604825255 89% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0791871913498 0.102734651613 77% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.077250566507 0.0668474354756 116% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.468894048241 0.534917948617 88% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.154250239545 0.148666948902 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103458853675 0.13441755203 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0597424261173 0.0742828286743 80% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.324774317871 0.324241079732 100% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0637304199812 0.0640056729886 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189350086124 0.22793763319 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0420527173386 0.0582452615562 72% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.68436873747 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.41883767535 175% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 5.88977955912 170% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.60220440882 115% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.00200400802 150% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 10.493987976 152% => OK
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Rates: 70.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay E-rater: 6.5 Out of 9