What an important part of human beings' lives which play a prominent role in their prosperities is their jobs. Individual's spend most of their time on the careers and it greatly affect their private lives as well as their social habits. Germane to this fact, a question which is the matter of debate, a controversial one, is whether people should choose jobs which are similar to their parents' careers or they should opt a job (to have a job ) which is completely different from their parents' jobs. Although some people, in a general extent, may be on the belief that children should select their careers different from their parants' jobs, I am personally of the conviction that continuing parents' jobs yields much more better results for two conspicuous reasons.
One reason giving in favor of this fact (thesis) is that choosing jobs similar to our parents' jobs increases the (our) chance of gaining prosperity (prosperities) in our future job (jobs). To put it in general words, children, who select their jobs (his job) as same as their parents, are much more familiar with that jobs' conditions (conditions of that job and this lead them to) which guide them to have a better understanding of that job. To elucidate more on this issue (Furthermore), their parents can also willingly help (them) to be successful and (they shoulder) some parts of the heavy burden of that job can be shouldered by them. As an illustration, my brother chose his career as a (an) advertiser (advertiser), which is as same my father's job, and every time that he faces (faced) a problems my father help him to handle the difficulties. As a result, after just two years, he became one of the most important advetisers in our home town. As you can see, having a job similar to our parents' leads individuls to obtain more chances of successes rather than others.
Another reason that cannot go unnoticed is that they can began (are able to) to work very soon. To shed some lights on this premise, it is worth noting that nowadays there are not any (a few) vacancies in our country and a lot of educated students have difficulties finding an open position. However, students' (students) who are eager to have a similar job as their parents can easily ask their parents (them) to act as an intermediary and find an open position for them. In another word, parents can easily pave the way of finding jobs for their children and assist them in solving the difficultis (difficulties) associated with finding open positions. For instance, when I was attending Amirkabir university of technology, I had a friend who was searching for a job so as to support his university tution (tuition) fees. Although he applied for a lot of jobs, he get (gets) the chance of beginig (beginning) none of them. Hence, he asked his father to help him, and his father asked his manager to let his son work in their company. His manager accepted his request and now my friend is working their (there) for five years. This taught me that parents can easily speed up the procedures of finding jobs.
To wrap it up, I am personally one of the proponents who cites a clear bias in favor of continuing our parents' jobs. To recapitualate the reasons, it will not only help us to handle difficulties (we will not only be able to handle difficulties much more easily), which we face during working, but (it also enables us to) also we can find begin our job very immediatly. Government should encourage individuals to choose jobs as same as their parents.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 190, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'affects'?
Suggestion: affects
...heir time on the careers and it greatly affect their private lives as well as their so...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s' careers or they should opt a job to have a job which is completely diffe...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... or they should opt a job to have a job which is completely different from their...
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Line 1, column 750, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
...ntinuing parents' jobs yields much more better results for two conspicuous reasons. ...
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Line 3, column 114, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'our'?
Suggestion: the; our
...lar to our parents' jobs increases the our chance of gaining prosperity prosperiti...
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Line 3, column 326, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: conditions
...much more familiar with that jobs' conditions conditions of that job and this lead them to which...
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Line 3, column 687, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...tration, my brother chose his career as a an advertiser advertiser, which is as s...
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Line 3, column 687, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'a' or 'an' is left.
Suggestion: a; an
...tration, my brother chose his career as a an advertiser advertiser, which is as same...
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Line 3, column 692, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: advertiser
...on, my brother chose his career as a an advertiser advertiser, which is as same my father's jo...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...vertiser advertiser, which is as same my father's job, and every time that h...
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Line 3, column 791, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a problem' or simply 'problems'?
Suggestion: a problem; problems
...job, and every time that he faces faced a problems my father help him to handle the diffic...
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Line 3, column 949, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... important advetisers in our home town. As you can see, having a job similar to o...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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... advetisers in our home town. As you can see, having a job similar to our parents...
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Line 5, column 58, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'begin'
Suggestion: begin
...at cannot go unnoticed is that they can began are able to to work very soon. To shed ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: to
...noticed is that they can began are able to to work very soon. To shed some lights on ...
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Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ad a friend who was searching for a job so as to support his university tution tuition f...
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Line 5, column 861, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'gets'.
Suggestion: gets
...though he applied for a lot of jobs, he get gets the chance of beginig beginning no...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'furthermore', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'well', 'as to', 'for instance', 'in general', 'as a result', 'as well as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.235714285714 0.229887763892 103% => OK
Verbs: 0.144285714286 0.158761421928 91% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0585714285714 0.0866891130778 68% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0557142857143 0.046263068375 120% => OK
Pronouns: 0.105714285714 0.0685040099705 154% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.102857142857 0.118717715034 87% => OK
Participles: 0.0285714285714 0.0351676179071 81% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.84662861713 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0371428571429 0.0309702414327 120% => OK
Particles: 0.00285714285714 0.00188951952338 151% => OK
Determiners: 0.0785714285714 0.0887237588012 89% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0228571428571 0.0209618222197 109% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.02 0.0139019557991 144% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3539.0 2387.08602151 148% => OK
No of words: 611.0 408.028673835 150% => OK
Chars per words: 5.79214402619 5.86048508987 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.97176167858 4.48200974243 111% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.312602291326 0.338922669872 92% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.229132569558 0.251872472559 91% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.153846153846 0.174417080927 88% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.11620294599 0.112833075102 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84662861713 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.451718494272 0.524397521467 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 54.9302956463 59.2087087015 93% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6684587814 106% => OK
Sentence length: 27.7727272727 20.5533526081 135% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.6566301822 48.84282405 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 160.863636364 120.699889404 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7727272727 20.5533526081 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.636363636364 0.644075263715 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.54480286738 307% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 50.6859842285 45.7405998639 111% => OK
Elegance: 1.20093457944 1.45489161554 83% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.423937341834 0.300154397459 141% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.135681548906 0.103427244359 131% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0861041781384 0.0752933317313 114% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.483306149397 0.497263757937 97% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.130276281537 0.151897553556 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.162236612159 0.114077575197 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0921292443994 0.0781384742642 118% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.435072532303 0.336927656856 129% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0996919068631 0.067059652881 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.315527034741 0.210909579961 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0428979734792 0.0618886996521 69% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8870967742 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 17.0 8.42114695341 202% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 22.0 13.6433691756 161% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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