To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham.
The author claims here that to serve the rising needs of student over 50 years, we should build new dormitories and that will attract more prospective students. The argument reveals several instances of poor reasoning and ill-defined terminology. To justify this recommendation, the author reasons that, enrollment is growing and based on it will be double over next 5 decades. However, careful scrutiny of the evidence reveals that it provides little credible support for the author's recommendation. Hence the argument can be considered incomplete or unsubstantiated.
First of all, the argument readily assumes that the current trend of current enrollment will continue over 50 years. This is merely an assumption made without much solid ground. We cant predict future whether trend will continue or not and recommendation give little clue about that in certain field enrollments are growing or in every field they are growing. Hence the argument would have been more convincing if it explicitly include the information about the growing enrollments in college and its genuineness over 50 years of time.
The argument readily claims that the rent for an apartment has risen in recent years so we have to build dormitories for it. This again is weak and unsupported claim as it does not demonstrate any correct correlation between rent of apartment and to build dormitories. We can not readily assumes that rant has increased and for that we have to build new hostels for the students. If the argument have provided evidence with some numbers that student can not afford the rent of an apartment and only option is to build the dormitories then it would have been a lot more convincing to the reader.
Finally the author claims that an attractive dormitories will attract more students. However, careful scrutiny of the evidence reveals that it provides little credible support for the author's conclusion in several critical respects, and raises skeptical questions. For example, if dormitories will build today and the admission will be double after 50 years than will it be attractive?, Is attractive dormitories measure for enrollment of students?. Without convincing answers to these questions, the reader is left with impression that the claims made by the author are more of a wishful thinking rather than substantive evidence,
In conclusion, the author's argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster it further, the author must provide more concrete evidence, perhaps by way of a reliable a detailed analysis for building new dormitories. Finally, to better evaluate the argument , it would be necessary to know more information about why over 50 we need new dormitories.
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Discourse Markers used:
['finally', 'first', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'then', 'for example', 'in conclusion', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.224839400428 0.25644967241 88% => OK
Verbs: 0.160599571734 0.15541462614 103% => OK
Adjectives: 0.10278372591 0.0836205057962 123% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0535331905782 0.0520304965353 103% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0406852248394 0.0272364105082 149% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.130620985011 0.125424944231 104% => OK
Participles: 0.03426124197 0.0416121511921 82% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.92126387993 2.79052419416 105% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0235546038544 0.026700313972 88% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.10278372591 0.113004496875 91% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.03426124197 0.0255425247493 134% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00428265524625 0.0127820249294 34% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2697.0 2731.13054187 99% => OK
No of words: 431.0 446.07635468 97% => OK
Chars per words: 6.25754060325 6.12365571057 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.57801047555 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.396751740139 0.378187486979 105% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.334106728538 0.287650121315 116% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.220417633411 0.208842608468 106% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.139211136891 0.135150697306 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92126387993 2.79052419416 105% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 207.018472906 94% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.452436194896 0.469332199767 96% => OK
Word variations: 49.3677162132 52.1807786196 95% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.039408867 95% => OK
Sentence length: 22.6842105263 23.2022227129 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.4761128599 57.7814097925 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.947368421 141.986410481 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6842105263 23.2022227129 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.526315789474 0.724660767414 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 3.58251231527 419% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 56.0948833801 51.9672348444 108% => OK
Elegance: 1.52941176471 1.8405768891 83% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.373074376168 0.441005458295 85% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.105449181271 0.135418324435 78% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0667967179954 0.0829849096947 80% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.545979228849 0.58762219726 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.128342908793 0.147661913831 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.159519972927 0.193483328276 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0849229202886 0.0970749176394 87% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.360508913585 0.42659136922 85% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0454018063494 0.0774707102158 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.260557655844 0.312017818177 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0619109027289 0.0698173142475 89% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.33743842365 132% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.87684729064 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.82512315271 21% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 10.0 6.46551724138 155% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 5.36822660099 130% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 14.657635468 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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