Time is one of the most important things in our lives. It is the most valuable things that we have. Every person chooses how to dedicate his time according to his point of view. The issue whether people today spend too much time on their personal enjoyment – doing things that they like rather than doing things they should do or not aroused much controversy among different people with different perspectives, different ages, and different cultures. Some contend think that the personal interest is an essential part to stay healthy and productive in one’s life. However I completely disagree, the people should do things they should do due to there are many factors that reduce the people do not spend proper time in their personal enjoyment such as fierce competition in every field, and to satisfy basic family needs.
The presence of the fierce competitions in our word today, putting the people under pressure for seeking for success. For getting a job with a high salary, you should meet the requirement such as high experience, and good knowledge which requires from you a lot of time to get it, therefore, you will not have enough time for your personal enjoyment. Even you got your job, you will have to work hard to achieve success, and sometimes the atmosphere in work surrounded with the competitions among people, everyone is looking for promotion within a short period of time. It is true that the competition atmosphere is the key of development any company since everyone does his best to get his goal but at the same time, it declines their time of personal enjoyment. For example, I am working in compounding Pharmacy in Manhattan. I worked in this pharmacy 2 years ago but they hired another co-worker 6 months ago, I taught her everything, and she started to work really hard to take my position, Therefore, I started to work hard, ignore all my personal issue and enjoyment to stay in my position, and achieve my goal. Even in the schools, the students are facing a lot of competition, they want to get a high score as their peer, thus, they study hard, no time for playing as before, and as the result, they get a high score for better future.
In addition to the pressure of the competition, with the development of technology and our modern life, the people basic needs increase; the human desire becomes more insatiable. The people should work hard to get more money to satisfy their family needs since everything now is so expensive. For example, my husband works in the company morning, and his salary is not enough since we have three children, so, he works at night as limousine driver. We almost are not seeing him expect Sunday. He works all the time to satisfy our needs such as our mortgage, our car payment, our food, and our kids need. It is really tough life but what we can do, there is nothing to do. We have to do what we should do because this is our life but thanks god for everything.
As all things considered, it is true that we have to spend time on our personal enjoyment to relax from the stress of the work, which helps us to focus more on our work and to be more productive. When it comes to satisfying our basic needs and fierce competitions in our today’s world, we have to do what we should do.
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Essay evaluation report
Some contend think that
Some contend to think that
Some think that
due to there are many factors
Description: check books how to use 'due to'.
The presence of the fierce competitions in our word today, putting the people under pressure for seeking for success.
Description: what is the verb for this sentence? can you re-write this sentence?
the people basic needs increase;
people's basic needs increase;
It is really tough life
It is a really tough life
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 23 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 579 350
No. of Characters: 2601 1500
No. of Different Words: 247 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.905 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.492 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.411 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 168 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 112 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.318 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.172 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.591 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.318 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.473 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.198 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Time is one of the most important things...
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Line 2, column 579, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...lthy and productive in one's life. However I completely disagree, the people shoul...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ld, and to satisfy basic family needs. The presence of the fierce competit...
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Line 4, column 560, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...is looking for promotion within a short period of time. It is true that the competition atmosp...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... get a high score for better future. In addition to the pressure of the compe...
^^^^^
Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... life but thanks god for everything. As all things considered, it is true tha...
^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'really', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'for example', 'in addition', 'such as', 'it is true']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.216589861751 0.229887763892 94% => OK
Verbs: 0.153609831029 0.158761421928 97% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0844854070661 0.0866891130778 97% => OK
Adverbs: 0.047619047619 0.046263068375 103% => OK
Pronouns: 0.10599078341 0.0685040099705 155% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.109062980031 0.118717715034 92% => OK
Participles: 0.0245775729647 0.0351676179071 70% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.53501695051 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0399385560676 0.0309702414327 129% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0691244239631 0.0887237588012 78% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0153609831029 0.0209618222197 73% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0122887864823 0.0139019557991 88% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3298.0 2387.08602151 138% => OK
No of words: 580.0 408.028673835 142% => OK
Chars per words: 5.68620689655 5.86048508987 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90746259869 4.48200974243 109% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.3 0.338922669872 89% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.206896551724 0.251872472559 82% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.148275862069 0.174417080927 85% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.1 0.112833075102 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53501695051 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.45 0.524397521467 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 53.8235840832 59.2087087015 91% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6684587814 106% => OK
Sentence length: 26.3636363636 20.5533526081 128% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.9584488415 48.84282405 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.909090909 120.699889404 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3636363636 20.5533526081 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.545454545455 0.644075263715 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.54480286738 108% => OK
Readability: 47.0532915361 45.7405998639 103% => OK
Elegance: 1.14 1.45489161554 78% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.350177433252 0.300154397459 117% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.134529136508 0.103427244359 130% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.122432228176 0.0752933317313 163% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.477875930003 0.497263757937 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.151311363206 0.151897553556 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125631835288 0.114077575197 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0953380166529 0.0781384742642 122% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.449948440868 0.336927656856 134% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0524509606126 0.067059652881 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263976934901 0.210909579961 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105743847125 0.0618886996521 171% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8870967742 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.91756272401 81% => OK
Positive topic words: 15.0 8.42114695341 178% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 20.0 13.6433691756 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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