The paragraph shows the doubt on the painting of an elderly woman by most famous painter Rembrandt. Paragraph states that this painting is contrary to the styles of the painter Rembrandt. Whereas lecture clarify the doubts by adding more information about the painting.
Firstly, the paragraph doubts on the painting by Rembrandt by showing inconsistency in the painting by delineating costly dark fur collar and ordinary linen cap which is against his style of painting. Contrary to this opinion, lecture states that painting had been made by Rembrandt and it has been modified. She says that dark collar was not original in the painting portrayed by Rembrandt however valuable fur collar has been added to the increase the value of the old painting. As Rembrandt is famous for light and shadow, collar was light in color which was reflecting light on the face of woman.
Secondary, paragraph states that examination proved that painting panel comprises pieces of wood glued together again opposite to Rembrandt's work. Whereas lecture says that the original painting had been portrayed in the one piece of the wood and later they added pieces of panel to give more value to the painting. Adding more value to her statement she clarifies that original panel of the painting had been taken by the same tree which was used in the other works of Rembrandt.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 189, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...to the styles of the painter Rembrandt. Whereas lecture clarify the doubts by adding mo...
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Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'firstly', 'however', 'if', 'second', 'whereas']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.293838862559 0.261695866417 112% => OK
Verbs: 0.137440758294 0.158904122519 86% => OK
Adjectives: 0.132701421801 0.0723426182421 183% => Less adjectives wanted.
Adverbs: 0.0284360189573 0.0435111971325 65% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0284360189573 0.0277247811725 103% => OK
Prepositions: 0.151658767773 0.128828473217 118% => OK
Participles: 0.0663507109005 0.0370669169778 179% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.4982203711 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0284360189573 0.0208969081088 136% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00154638098197 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.113744075829 0.128158765124 89% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0 0.0158828679856 0% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00947867298578 0.0114777025283 83% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1197.0 1645.83664459 73% => OK
No of words: 199.0 271.125827815 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.01507537688 6.08160592843 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75589349951 4.04852973271 93% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.361809045226 0.374372842146 97% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.286432160804 0.287516216867 100% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.21608040201 0.187439937562 115% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.115577889447 0.113142543107 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4982203711 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 145.348785872 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502512562814 0.539623497131 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 43.3101870776 53.8517498576 80% => OK
How many sentences: 8.0 13.0529801325 61% => OK
Sentence length: 24.875 21.7502111507 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.0862152601 49.3711431718 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.625 132.220823453 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.875 21.7502111507 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.75 0.878197800319 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.09492273731 73% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.39072847682 29% => OK
Readability: 53.5182160804 50.5018328374 106% => OK
Elegance: 2.63414634146 1.90840788429 138% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.649667002643 0.549887131256 118% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.214354957155 0.142949733639 150% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.074908101378 0.0787303798458 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.722924995062 0.631733273073 114% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.0796056895042 0.139662658121 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.381054806316 0.266732575781 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.1040507167 0.103435571967 101% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.487091986874 0.414875509568 117% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0464260238105 0.0530846634433 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.523568031889 0.40443939384 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0580550491663 0.0528353158467 110% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.26048565121 23% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 5.0 3.49668874172 143% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.62251655629 55% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 3.1766004415 31% => OK
Total topic words: 8.0 10.2958057395 78% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Not in a correct format.
The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%) but more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
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Minimum 200 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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