It is evident that in our current society events happening around have tremendous importance in our lives. Many people think that it is not necessary to know the events without related to people, while others do not. I, however believe that Knowing to the affairs will help people live to be much more educational. There are several reasons that I could discuss to support my argument to the two that I feel are the most relevant to this topic. First, it helps people be a well-informed person. Also, we can expand the social network with happening around the world.
First of all, the most important reason for thinking this way is that it is easier to become a successful professional when we start to know social incidents around the world. Commonly in society, many companies tend to prefer people who have their own social perspective. If people are interested in social issues, they will be able to obtain a lot of ideas and thought on it which is an essential element to succeed in our workplace. A really good example can be seen in Richard Branson. I read online that Branson, a CEO of Virgin, transformed his company into one of the most profitable information technology and entertainment enterprises in the world. In one of his interviews he said that although he didn’t attend university, he was able to succeed his life and establish his own companies. This was because of his social interests. He always paid attention to our current issues because he wanted to be a rich man. As a result, he was able to create many hit singer’s albums, such as Beatles. The most successful singer ever made. This example clearly shows that social incidents affect positively people mind because of the success it entails.
Also, another reason for feeling this way is that People can build relationships with those around them when they don’t try to understand social happenings. Due to the changes in culture and individualism, it is becoming increasingly difficult to meet and build relationships with others. This will be magnified when their interests do not match with others. A recent article I read on the Korea Herald revealed some interesting findings. According to the article mentioned, a surprising number of university students claimed that they are too lonely. They have more opportunity to make acquaintance but the relationships never reach the genuine friendships because they don’t need to know social and political issues. Just last year, when I was freshmen students, I had only a friend because I was not able to share social opinions with other classmates even my girlfriend. As this outcome or the lack thereof shows that people have to have their own opinion on social affairs because it hinders people from expanding social networks.
Although a person has his right to keeps an eye on only events having an effect on his life, this argument not always suitable because his life might be changed in uncertain ways. Furthermore, there are chain effects that one event affects one and another. Examples abound like the terrier attack in the United States had a great impact on Americans' economic situations so many Asian countries underwent slumps. With the pros and cons weighed, ignoring seemingly untouchable events can lower a person’s opportunity to adjust him to the continuously changing society.
All things considered, the reasons I mentioned above, I believe that I have sufficiently and adequately explained my position regarding this topic.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 26 in 30
Category: Very Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 30 15
No. of Words: 582 350
No. of Characters: 2838 1500
No. of Different Words: 299 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.912 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.876 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.694 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 222 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 151 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 92 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 69 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.4 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.446 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.467 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.256 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.426 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.111 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
It is evident that in our current societ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ork with happening around the world. First of all, the most important reason ...
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Line 3, column 970, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun hit seems to be countable; consider using: 'many hits'.
Suggestion: many hits
...man. As a result, he was able to create many hit singer's albums, such as Beatles. ...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d because of the success it entails. Also, another reason for feeling this wa...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ople from expanding social networks. Although a person has his right to keeps...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'really', 'regarding', 'so', 'well', 'while', 'i feel', 'such as', 'as a result', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.219662058372 0.229887763892 96% => OK
Verbs: 0.176651305684 0.158761421928 111% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0906298003072 0.0866891130778 105% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0537634408602 0.046263068375 116% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0798771121352 0.0685040099705 117% => OK
Prepositions: 0.10599078341 0.118717715034 89% => OK
Participles: 0.0291858678955 0.0351676179071 83% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.81498775395 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0414746543779 0.0309702414327 134% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0798771121352 0.0887237588012 90% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0138248847926 0.0209618222197 66% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.010752688172 0.0139019557991 77% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3532.0 2387.08602151 148% => OK
No of words: 579.0 408.028673835 142% => OK
Chars per words: 6.10017271157 5.86048508987 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90534594407 4.48200974243 109% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.402417962003 0.338922669872 119% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.284974093264 0.251872472559 113% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.177892918826 0.174417080927 102% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.13298791019 0.112833075102 118% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81498775395 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 303.0 212.727598566 142% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523316062176 0.524397521467 100% => OK
Word variations: 65.6185589063 59.2087087015 111% => OK
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6684587814 145% => OK
Sentence length: 19.3 20.5533526081 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.584706798 48.84282405 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.733333333 120.699889404 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3 20.5533526081 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.644075263715 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 90% => OK
Readability: 47.7974093264 45.7405998639 104% => OK
Elegance: 1.14356435644 1.45489161554 79% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306460530963 0.300154397459 102% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0922596866081 0.103427244359 89% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0715359052453 0.0752933317313 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.415216131149 0.497263757937 84% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.160167526966 0.151897553556 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.096062558419 0.114077575197 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0677585724594 0.0781384742642 87% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.297260707091 0.336927656856 88% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.139684428853 0.067059652881 208% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188346978062 0.210909579961 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0912390917712 0.0618886996521 147% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8870967742 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.91756272401 81% => OK
Positive topic words: 17.0 8.42114695341 202% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.75985663082 145% => OK
Total topic words: 25.0 13.6433691756 183% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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