The issue whether university should spend money on social activities as they do for academics arouses much controvesary among different students. Some students disagree that university allocate money for sports because they think that library is the principal part for university funding as it helps students to gain a lot of knowledge and information that they can not receive from their professors because the limited time in the lecture. On the other hand, some students in favor of social activity funding. As far as I am concerned , I think it is wise for the university to fund the social activities as they do for academic libraries because it helps students to stay healthy both physically and mentally as well as it will help them to learn a lot of valuable things in their lives.
First of all, health is the prerequisite for future success. Of course, library provides students with a tremendous amount of information but no use for this knowledge if the students are sick.Therefore, to secure a good future for them, they have to be in a good health .A good mind in a good health, they will thrive and prosper by doing exercise that way they will be more active to focus on their studies . What i mean is, after a long lecture ,the students fell bored and tired, they need to do something different than looking at board or books, they need to realx, the only way to do this is playing sport together to refresh their minds.For example, when i was in college, after attending three hours on biology lecture , I could not focus any longer except playing tennis for half an hour , that helped me to relax and released the negative pressure from the previous lecture and in return it helped me to focus on the next lecture as well as it kept my body in a good shape and healthy . As you can see, a good health promote a good education.
In addition to that, social activities are very beneficial for students to cultivate some social life skills. The university is not only the place for students to expand their minds but also aplace for them to socialize.What i mean is , the students can expand their social network through these activities as the can make friends when they playing soccer together.For example, when i was sophomore student ,i spent all my time in classes attending lectures or in the library reading books, it was great for my academic success but at the same time i felt lonely as i don not had any friends. However, at my senior year ,I enrolled in a soccer team on campus then , i made a lot of friends and i learned from them alot of important life skils such as how to be a successful member in a team work since then , I became outgiong person and sociable.This experience demonstrate the importance of social activities in students social life.
To put in a nutshell, it is important for the university to fund sports as they do for academics libraries.Not only because it is imoprtant for students health, but also because it is important for their social lives.We all should support social activities in colleges.
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Essay evaluation report
some students in favor of social activity funding.
some students are in favor of social activity funding.
Sentence: The issue whether university should spend money on social activities as they do for academics arouses much controvesary among different students.
Error: controvesary Suggestion: controversy
Sentence: What i mean is, after a long lecture ,the students fell bored and tired, they need to do something different than looking at board or books, they need to realx, the only way to do this is playing sport together to refresh their minds.For example, when i was in college, after attending three hours on biology lecture , I could not focus any longer except playing tennis for half an hour , that helped me to relax and released the negative pressure from the previous lecture and in return it helped
Error: realx Suggestion: relax
Sentence: The university is not only the place for students to expand their minds but also aplace for them to socialize.What i mean is , the students can expand their social network through these activities as the can make friends when they playing soccer together.For example, when i was sophomore student ,i spent all my time in classes attending lectures or in the library reading books, it was great for my academic success but at the same time i felt lonely as i don not had any friends.
Error: aplace Suggestion: place
Sentence: However, at my senior year ,I enrolled in a soccer team on campus then , i made a lot of friends and i learned from them alot of important life skils such as how to be a successful member in a team work since then , I became outgiong person and sociable.This experience demonstrate the importance of social activities in students social life.
Error: outgiong Suggestion: outgoing
Error: alot Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: skils Suggestion: skill
Sentence: To put in a nutshell, it is important for the university to fund sports as they do for academics libraries.Not only because it is imoprtant for students health, but also because it is important for their social lives.We all should support social activities in colleges.
Error: imoprtant Suggestion: important
flaws:
Try not to use 'you, I, they' as the subject of a sentence. Look:
when
i was sophomore student ,
i spent all my time in classes attending lectures or in the library reading books, it was great for my academic success but at the same time
i felt lonely as
i don not had any friends. However, at my senior year ,
I enrolled in a soccer team on campus then ,
i made a lot of friends and
i learned from them alot of important life skils such as how to be a successful member in a team work since then ,
I became outgiong person and sociable.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 20 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 544 350
No. of Characters: 2457 1500
No. of Different Words: 239 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.829 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.517 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.486 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 172 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 127 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 81 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 41.846 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 27.687 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.769 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.385 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.597 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.186 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'well', 'for example', 'i mean', 'in addition', 'of course', 'such as', 'as well as', 'first of all', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.235701906412 0.229887763892 103% => OK
Verbs: 0.147313691508 0.158761421928 93% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0970537261698 0.0866891130778 112% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0467937608319 0.046263068375 101% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0762564991334 0.0685040099705 111% => OK
Prepositions: 0.145580589255 0.118717715034 123% => OK
Participles: 0.0190641247834 0.0351676179071 54% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.66447669804 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0346620450607 0.0309702414327 112% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0901213171577 0.0887237588012 102% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0173310225303 0.0209618222197 83% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0103986135182 0.0139019557991 75% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3081.0 2387.08602151 129% => OK
No of words: 545.0 408.028673835 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.65321100917 5.86048508987 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83169070408 4.48200974243 108% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.328440366972 0.338922669872 97% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.244036697248 0.251872472559 97% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.166972477064 0.174417080927 96% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0954128440367 0.112833075102 85% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66447669804 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.449541284404 0.524397521467 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 52.7418799205 59.2087087015 89% => OK
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6684587814 58% => OK
Sentence length: 45.4166666667 20.5533526081 221% => Sentence lengths are too long.
Sentence length SD: 164.99821127 48.84282405 338% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 256.75 120.699889404 213% => Less chars per sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 45.4166666667 20.5533526081 221% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 1.5 0.644075263715 233% => Less Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 39.0 5.54480286738 703% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 69.8203363914 45.7405998639 153% => OK
Elegance: 1.48076923077 1.45489161554 102% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213550962048 0.300154397459 71% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.123213727631 0.103427244359 119% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0595845982649 0.0752933317313 79% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.609121798592 0.497263757937 122% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.220742872267 0.151897553556 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102618218538 0.114077575197 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0497833174747 0.0781384742642 64% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.428654083375 0.336927656856 127% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0152801911451 0.067059652881 23% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158031008591 0.210909579961 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.025203023341 0.0618886996521 41% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8870967742 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.86379928315 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 9.0 8.42114695341 107% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 2.4623655914 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 10.0 13.6433691756 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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