A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal receive little to no professional dental care, while people in suburban areas in the United States see a dentist an average of 1.25 times per year. Thus, regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay.
The study claims that children in Himalayan mountain region have lower levels of tooth decay than children in suburban area in the United States. Children in suburban areas receive dental care more dental care than also are prone to tooth decay. Whereas, Nepalese children are less prone to the decay. Therefore, it claims that regular dental care is not helpful in preventing truth decay. From mere one fact, author concludes that regular dental care is not helpful preventing the tooth decay. The stimuli has many flaws as it doesn't reach a conclusion through cogent reasons.
Firstly,the study has no concrete proof that shows that the analysis was conducted upon what number of children. It is possible that the area covered for study has children who have healthy teeth. And, also same can be with United States. The study might not have covered up all suburban areas. Instead, it might have covered only states with children suffering from tooth decay.
Secondly, it is stated that the Nepalese children less often see a doctor than children from suburban areas. But, it is possible that Nepalese people living in Himalayan mountain region may find herbs and natural medicine which can cure or make them less prone to tooth decay. On the contrary, children in suburban areas of United States who are not in the vicinity of these herbs may require them to see doctor who give medicines that are less effective. Thus, Nepalese may use medicines and herbs that precludes visiting a doctor.
Thirdly, Dental care is very important to be less prone to tooth decay. And, as Nepalese can receive that dental care from plants and herbs makes there teeth healthy. Whereas, United States children who visit 1.25 times a year are receiving dental care but the healing time may be more. Hence, a hasty generalization is made by author without noticing minute details of other factors affecting the study.
Fourthly, it is possible that the children who are visiting on an average 1.25 times a year may be more severely affected by tooth decay.The study doesn't discuss the level of decay. The healing time may require more time for such children. The supporting line again is challenged by this level of decay, that means that healing time is a little more but it may be helpful.
To recapitulate, the study must present facts that clearly mentions about the number of children bring surveyed as well as it should cover on an average all children to come to a conclusion. Dental care may be done by herbal plants and not only by doctors. Therefore, Nepalese do not require to visit to a doctor more often than suburban children. It may happen that the healing time is more for suburban children, but dental care is important to prevent tooth decay.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: visiting
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'hence', 'may', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'therefore', 'third', 'thirdly', 'thus', 'well', 'whereas', 'as well as', 'on the contrary']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.253411306043 0.25644967241 99% => OK
Verbs: 0.167641325536 0.15541462614 108% => OK
Adjectives: 0.103313840156 0.0836205057962 124% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0662768031189 0.0520304965353 127% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0233918128655 0.0272364105082 86% => OK
Prepositions: 0.107212475634 0.125424944231 85% => OK
Participles: 0.0409356725146 0.0416121511921 98% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.33030169206 2.79052419416 84% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0233918128655 0.026700313972 88% => OK
Particles: 0.00194931773879 0.001811407834 108% => OK
Determiners: 0.0799220272904 0.113004496875 71% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0311890838207 0.0255425247493 122% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0233918128655 0.0127820249294 183% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2751.0 2731.13054187 101% => OK
No of words: 467.0 446.07635468 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.89079229122 6.12365571057 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.57801047555 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.364025695931 0.378187486979 96% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.244111349036 0.287650121315 85% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.175588865096 0.208842608468 84% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.06852248394 0.135150697306 51% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33030169206 2.79052419416 84% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 207.018472906 92% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.408993576017 0.469332199767 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 45.2575458549 52.1807786196 87% => OK
How many sentences: 26.0 20.039408867 130% => OK
Sentence length: 17.9615384615 23.2022227129 77% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.3070500536 57.7814097925 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.807692308 141.986410481 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9615384615 23.2022227129 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.653846153846 0.724660767414 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 3.58251231527 223% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 42.3726733652 51.9672348444 82% => OK
Elegance: 1.56060606061 1.8405768891 85% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.421662071901 0.441005458295 96% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.13375018774 0.135418324435 99% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.119906715243 0.0829849096947 144% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.509387624973 0.58762219726 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.130257034412 0.147661913831 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14770739234 0.193483328276 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.144530280042 0.0970749176394 149% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.315619463223 0.42659136922 74% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0436775263441 0.0774707102158 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.259347979281 0.312017818177 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.128765102213 0.0698173142475 184% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.33743842365 144% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.87684729064 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.82512315271 124% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 6.46551724138 170% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 5.36822660099 130% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.82389162562 142% => OK
Total topic words: 22.0 14.657635468 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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