TPO-08 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Unfortunately advertising nowadays not only haven't any useful content but also have so many harmful. Some faces of these advertising cause problems such as: diseases because of gunk food, dropout because of wasting time to watch colorful attractive advertising and earning negative habits especially laziness and overeating.
First, most children advertising are for potato chips, cookies, chocolate and generally junk foods. These foods cause many problems for health such as rotten teeth, over weighting, hormonal disorders and some others incurable diseases especially different types of cancers. Children can't manage their eating desire unfortunately their desire to overeating increase several times when they faces with junk foods. Companies use this to sell more and more of these harmful foods with producing colorful advertising they use cartoons characters such as: Angry birds, Mickey Mouse, Super man to attract more and more customers.
Second, these advertising almost contain colorful scenes which children like them and consume so much time to watch them. Playing in open places with other children has a good effect on their mental physical health instead watching TV programs specially colorful advertising cause children haven't enough time to play. Studies have shown that there is a correlation between watching television and obesity. Excessive TV watching (more than 3 hours a day) can also contribute to sleep difficulties, behavior problems, lower grades, and other health issues.
Finally, television might be addictive. For those who watch a lot, it's very hard to quit, so it is similar to a dependency like alcoholism or any another addiction. Recent studies have found that up to 12% percent of TV-watchers feel unhappy about the amount of TV they watch, consider themselves addicts, yet feel incapable of stopping themselves. On the other hand advertising affected children mind in a bad way after a short time period they will be dependent on watching advertising and will harm. Let clear a new faces of harmful effect of TV advertising for children: emotional disorder. Most of the TV advertising using cartoon characters in their TV show so children establish an emotional relation with them that isn't a healthy emotional relation.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: haven't
...rtunately advertising nowadays not only havent any useful content but also have so man...
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ly different types of cancers. Children cant manage their eating desire unfortunatel...
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Line 2, column 389, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'face', 'fax'
Suggestion: face; fax
...eating increase several times when they faces with junk foods. Companies use this to ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'so', 'such as']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.320512820513 0.229887763892 139% => OK
Verbs: 0.108974358974 0.158761421928 69% => OK
Adjectives: 0.166666666667 0.0866891130778 192% => Less adjectives wanted.
Adverbs: 0.0576923076923 0.046263068375 125% => OK
Pronouns: 0.025641025641 0.0685040099705 37% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0961538461538 0.118717715034 81% => OK
Participles: 0.0384615384615 0.0351676179071 109% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.60588032052 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.025641025641 0.0309702414327 83% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0448717948718 0.0887237588012 51% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0 0.0209618222197 0% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.00641025641026 0.0139019557991 46% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 952.0 2387.08602151 40% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 140.0 408.028673835 34% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.8 5.86048508987 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.43979062825 4.48200974243 77% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.478571428571 0.338922669872 141% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.342857142857 0.251872472559 136% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.278571428571 0.174417080927 160% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.157142857143 0.112833075102 139% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60588032052 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 96.0 212.727598566 45% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.685714285714 0.524397521467 131% => OK
Word variations: 67.1640959 59.2087087015 113% => OK
How many sentences: 6.0 20.6684587814 29% => More sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 23.3333333333 20.5533526081 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.7850937084 48.84282405 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 158.666666667 120.699889404 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3333333333 20.5533526081 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 0.644075263715 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 4.5376344086 44% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.54480286738 54% => OK
Readability: 57.619047619 45.7405998639 126% => OK
Elegance: 2.36666666667 1.45489161554 163% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139982844948 0.300154397459 47% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0629921182578 0.103427244359 61% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0307165160793 0.0752933317313 41% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.522835747395 0.497263757937 105% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.145173865596 0.151897553556 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0682180335329 0.114077575197 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.033978347797 0.0781384742642 43% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.262192014452 0.336927656856 78% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0 0.067059652881 0% => Paragraphs are so close to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110882921386 0.210909579961 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.019775059703 0.0618886996521 32% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 11.8870967742 17% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 2.0 8.42114695341 24% => More positive topic words wanted.
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 6.0 13.6433691756 44% => More topic words wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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