Life today is easier for young people and more comfortable than it was when our grandparents were children and young. Some people disagree with this sentence however I agree with this sentence because of the following reasons.
First of all, nowadays computer and higher technology is strikingly improved day by day. Young people have access to internet and computer and they can improve their life by the means of new Technology. They can play with computer they can listen to music or audio book . They can read a book without carrying heavy books.They can watch a movie,different kinds and genres. They can earn knowledge and go to online education and universities.
Moreover, we can use a car instead of walking even for grocery shopping. Going to work in much easier by the use of automobile.We can go to picnic by our van with our family and spend some time in nature and enjoy. Celebrating Thanksgiving day or somebody's birthday is the most amazing experience.
Furthermore, they did not have Television. Nowadays we have TV and satellite. We have access to news all over the world. Even we have access to election in united states. By this widespread access and international media everyone is more knowledgeable about politics and their future. Even with the help of facebook, we know more about our friends and we can ask for help if we need them anywhere in the world they are.
In summary, new improvement and technology help us as young people to enjoy more than our grandparents from our lives.
- TOEFL T P O 10 Integrated Writing Task 47
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
No. of Words: 261 350
More compound or complex sentences/clauses wanted. Try not to use pronouns like 'you, I, they...' as the subject of a sentence. Look:
Young people have access to internet and computer and
they can improve their life by the means of new Technology.
They can play with computer they can listen to music or audio book .
They can read a book without carrying heavy books.
They can watch a movie,different kinds and genres.
They can earn knowledge and go to online education and universities.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 20 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 261 350
No. of Characters: 1223 1500
No. of Different Words: 148 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.019 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.686 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.581 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 75 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 55 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 44 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 24 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.353 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.668 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.353 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.321 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.585 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.203 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 270, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...r they can listen to music or audio book . They can read a book without carrying h...
^^
Line 5, column 323, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: They
...ead a book without carrying heavy books.They can watch a movie,different kinds and g...
^^^^
Line 5, column 323, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ead a book without carrying heavy books.They can watch a movie,different kinds and g...
^^^^
Line 5, column 345, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , different
...rying heavy books.They can watch a movie,different kinds and genres. They can earn knowled...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 374, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...tch a movie,different kinds and genres. They can earn knowledge and go to online edu...
^^^^
Line 7, column 128, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: We
...in much easier by the use of automobile.We can go to picnic by our van with our fa...
^^
Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'in summary', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.256140350877 0.229887763892 111% => OK
Verbs: 0.136842105263 0.158761421928 86% => OK
Adjectives: 0.080701754386 0.0866891130778 93% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0456140350877 0.046263068375 99% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0912280701754 0.0685040099705 133% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.119298245614 0.118717715034 100% => OK
Participles: 0.0210526315789 0.0351676179071 60% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.85451974767 2.67179642975 144% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0280701754386 0.0309702414327 91% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.059649122807 0.0887237588012 67% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0315789473684 0.0209618222197 151% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00350877192982 0.0139019557991 25% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1569.0 2387.08602151 66% => OK
No of words: 260.0 408.028673835 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.03461538462 5.86048508987 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.48200974243 90% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.311538461538 0.338922669872 92% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.230769230769 0.251872472559 92% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.184615384615 0.174417080927 106% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.111538461538 0.112833075102 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.85451974767 2.67179642975 144% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 212.727598566 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.557692307692 0.524397521467 106% => OK
Word variations: 55.6860267786 59.2087087015 94% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6684587814 82% => OK
Sentence length: 15.2941176471 20.5533526081 74% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.4337708124 48.84282405 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.2941176471 120.699889404 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2941176471 20.5533526081 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.470588235294 0.644075263715 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.5376344086 132% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.54480286738 108% => OK
Readability: 38.371040724 45.7405998639 84% => OK
Elegance: 1.44871794872 1.45489161554 100% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264257000195 0.300154397459 88% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.130757079839 0.103427244359 126% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.095645480851 0.0752933317313 127% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.565400356092 0.497263757937 114% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.199783149141 0.151897553556 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0919668894514 0.114077575197 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0668784906483 0.0781384742642 86% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.170383115438 0.336927656856 51% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.105375371869 0.067059652881 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146541922877 0.210909579961 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110824595758 0.0618886996521 179% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8870967742 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.86379928315 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.91756272401 142% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 8.42114695341 83% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 2.4623655914 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 9.0 13.6433691756 66% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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