The reading passage explores with the issue of whether storing patients' medical records in electronic databases have more advantages than traditional paper-based record keeping. The professor's lecture deals with the same topic, however, she is uncertain about the benefits of using electronic databases, which contradicts what the reading states, and she uses three specific reasons to support her idea.
First, even though the reading passage suggests that the use of electronic records can reduce budgets, since the cost of storing and transferring of medical records can be saved a lot, the professor argues in the lecture that electronic databases can not saving money on record storage, this is because there are some necessary paper record for emergency back up, which means the cost of paper storage can not be reduced. Obviously, the professor's argument disproves its counterpart.
Moreover, contrary to the statement in the reading that electronic medical records can reduce the probability of medical errors by handing illegible handwriting and other human problems, the professor contends that the using of electronic database can not decrease medical errors, then she supports this point with the fact that doctors need staffs to interpret paper recorded informations to electronic database, so that Illegible handwriting can still be a problem, as a consequence, electronic medical records can not help reducing errors.
Finally, the professor asserts that it is difficult to use medical information for research, whereas the reading claims that medical records can substantially help medical research by gathering large amounts of data from patient records. The professor proves this claim is indefensible by pointing out that there are privacy laws strict the use of medical information of patients, as a consequence, researchers can not get large amount of patient's data records easily, so that electronic records's help of medical research is limited.
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- TPO-46 - Integrated Writing Task In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which informa 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 256, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'can' requires base form of the verb: 'save'
Suggestion: save
...cture that electronic databases can not saving money on record storage, this is becaus...
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Line 3, column 438, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'professors'' or 'professor's'?
Suggestion: professors'; professor's
...rage can not be reduced. Obviously, the professors argument disproves its counterpart. ...
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Line 5, column 527, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to reduce' or 'reduce'.
Suggestion: to reduce; reduce
...electronic medical records can not help reducing errors. Finally, the professor asser...
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Discourse Markers used:
['finally', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'whereas']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.268292682927 0.261695866417 103% => OK
Verbs: 0.15243902439 0.158904122519 96% => OK
Adjectives: 0.112804878049 0.0723426182421 156% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0457317073171 0.0435111971325 105% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0182926829268 0.0277247811725 66% => OK
Prepositions: 0.134146341463 0.128828473217 104% => OK
Participles: 0.0426829268293 0.0370669169778 115% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.8191310718 2.5805825403 109% => OK
Infinitives: 0.015243902439 0.0208969081088 73% => OK
Particles: 0.0030487804878 0.00154638098197 197% => OK
Determiners: 0.100609756098 0.128158765124 79% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.030487804878 0.0158828679856 192% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.015243902439 0.0114777025283 133% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1973.0 1645.83664459 120% => OK
No of words: 300.0 271.125827815 111% => OK
Chars per words: 6.57666666667 6.08160592843 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.04852973271 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.463333333333 0.374372842146 124% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.41 0.287516216867 143% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.26 0.187439937562 139% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.17 0.113142543107 150% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8191310718 2.5805825403 109% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 145.348785872 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526666666667 0.539623497131 98% => OK
Word variations: 53.5401470475 53.8517498576 99% => OK
How many sentences: 7.0 13.0529801325 54% => OK
Sentence length: 42.8571428571 21.7502111507 197% => Sentence lengths are too long.
Sentence length SD: 147.451410191 49.3711431718 299% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 281.857142857 132.220823453 213% => Less chars per sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 42.8571428571 21.7502111507 197% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 1.28571428571 0.878197800319 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.39072847682 88% => OK
Readability: 83.8571428571 50.5018328374 166% => OK
Elegance: 2.05633802817 1.90840788429 108% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.683017649727 0.549887131256 124% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.191009155794 0.142949733639 134% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.126831043765 0.0787303798458 161% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.775057350711 0.631733273073 123% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.216993686756 0.139662658121 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.379855993153 0.266732575781 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.1518485597 0.103435571967 147% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.436656567051 0.414875509568 105% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0222166352521 0.0530846634433 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.492957954368 0.40443939384 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.025582009269 0.0528353158467 48% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.26048565121 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 4.0 3.49668874172 114% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.62251655629 83% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 3.1766004415 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 7.0 10.2958057395 68% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.