The way a person spends his/ her time is very important part of his/ her life. It tells a lot about the characteristics, morality and belief of that person. Some people believe that today the mass population spend too much time on personal enjoyment rather than doing thing they should do. Others disagree. In my view, people today do not spend too much time doings things they should do instead of doing the right things for two reasons.
First, more and more people today are engaging in charity and trying to help the unfortunate people to have a better life. People are using science and technology to connect with people around the world and using this connection for betterment of mankind. This unique opportunity was not present previously. For example, when I was in University studying engineering, my friends and I joined Facebook, a social networking website, for catching up with each other. At first, we used this only for fun. But, through Facebook we came to that a lot of children of my country are deprived of basic education. These indigent children do not have any opportunity to go to school. So, I and my friend created an event in the Facebook to meet up with people who can help to set up a free night school for these children by volunteering. After that, we raised money and bought books, pencils, papers, boards and markers for the school and contacted some children to join our school. They were very excited and we were able to continue our plan successfully. This experience helped me understand that today people have more chances of doing the right things because of technology.
Second, there are many people today who spend time doing things which they enjoy personally and also help the society at the same time. In many universities, researchers and professors are working to invent new technology to help the people. For example, a few days ago, I watched an documentary about a professor of Texas Tech University who is currently researching on target drugs for Cancer. He and his research groups are working hard to find the algorithm which will help to identify the right drug for the cancer patient based on his genetics and condition. This is definitely a great endeavour. But, at the same time, the professor is really enjoying himself. From the video, you could tell that he personally likes what he is doing and will continue to do that. From this, I learnt that things that people like to do and the thing they should do aligns, that is the best scenario for the person.
- People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do. 70
- Advertising discourages people from being different individuals by making us want to be and to look the same. To what extent do you agree or disagree? 67
- TOEFL integrated writing: fuel-cell engines 80
- People who make decisions based on emotion and justify those decisions with logic afterwards are poor decision makers. 50
- TOEFL integrated writing: fuel-cell engines 80
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1130, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... today people have more chances of doing the right things because of technology. ...
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Line 5, column 282, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... For example, a few days ago, I watched an documentary about a professor of Texas ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'really', 'second', 'so', 'for example', 'in my view']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.249484536082 0.229887763892 109% => OK
Verbs: 0.167010309278 0.158761421928 105% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0639175257732 0.0866891130778 74% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0412371134021 0.046263068375 89% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0639175257732 0.0685040099705 93% => OK
Prepositions: 0.103092783505 0.118717715034 87% => OK
Participles: 0.0371134020619 0.0351676179071 106% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.55099978929 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0329896907216 0.0309702414327 107% => OK
Particles: 0.00618556701031 0.00188951952338 327% => OK
Determiners: 0.0989690721649 0.0887237588012 112% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0144329896907 0.0209618222197 69% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0185567010309 0.0139019557991 133% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2520.0 2387.08602151 106% => OK
No of words: 438.0 408.028673835 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.75342465753 5.86048508987 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.48200974243 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.324200913242 0.338922669872 96% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.214611872146 0.251872472559 85% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.150684931507 0.174417080927 86% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0890410958904 0.112833075102 79% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55099978929 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513698630137 0.524397521467 98% => OK
Word variations: 58.5241874771 59.2087087015 99% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6684587814 116% => OK
Sentence length: 18.25 20.5533526081 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.2393765408 48.84282405 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.0 120.699889404 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.25 20.5533526081 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.375 0.644075263715 58% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.5376344086 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 39.7111872146 45.7405998639 87% => OK
Elegance: 1.43181818182 1.45489161554 98% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294115226775 0.300154397459 98% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0968287456636 0.103427244359 94% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0809877323835 0.0752933317313 108% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.409396962123 0.497263757937 82% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.158171252033 0.151897553556 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0990408812986 0.114077575197 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.144688089943 0.0781384742642 185% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.323542012194 0.336927656856 96% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0931762887922 0.067059652881 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.267908266779 0.210909579961 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.147869761123 0.0618886996521 239% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8870967742 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 8.42114695341 142% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.4623655914 122% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.75985663082 109% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.