This topic asked that whet her children should manage their own money at very small age to be a financial responsible adult or not. Certainly, some people if asked would disagree with the statement and tell that this is not necessary, while others would mention that question depends on a great deal of factors; for example, somebody say that it will make them more irresponsible towards money. As far as I'm concerned, I adopt a firm position that children should manage their money as early as possible to understand the value of money.
First of all, it is important to consider that money and is management is difficult things and it takes years to master it. Certainly, every adult should the value of money. However, in most cases people do not understand the value of money. To illustrate that idea let's consider the following example. I remember when I was kid i used to demand everything i see in tv, everything I see in TV or my friend got new toy, I wanted it very badly and that demand quickly evolved in my daily hobby. That is the thing I regret most when now i understand the value of money, after finding job and earning it; I realize how dumb I was. As you can see, most people relate to this incident that we as a children did not valued the money and eventually we did not understand the value of things.
Equally important is the skill related to money management. Of course some people in some situations, this is the last thing they wanted to learn but, they also understand its importance. However it is fair to say that it is not easy to master, it takes year to understand basic deferences in the money monitoring or managing it. Event though it is difficult many people have mastered this skill and confessed that they have started this at very young age. The best example of this people is Warren Buffet. This early finance management skill instill the base of his company.
Finally, managing money is not about developing only monitory related skill, it teaches a person many things. This skill will develop indepency in child at very young age. He/she will be able to take decision at crucial time in their life. I think that this is the case foe many people as well. Sometime lack of indepence and decision making skill eventually lead people to loss of very important opportunity. I believe that money management skill not only develop people a good financial thinker but it develop person as a whole.
In conclusion, however this skill is very hard to learn and master but, if we try to develop this skill in child at very young age than it is the most important lesson of his/her life. Not only it will make them good person but it will make whole world a better thinker and better place.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'still', 'well', 'while', 'for example', 'i think', 'in conclusion', 'of course', 'first of all', 'in most cases']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.228893058161 0.229887763892 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.176360225141 0.158761421928 111% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0844277673546 0.0866891130778 97% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0769230769231 0.046263068375 166% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0806754221388 0.0685040099705 118% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0994371482176 0.118717715034 84% => OK
Participles: 0.0225140712946 0.0351676179071 64% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.42882463621 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0300187617261 0.0309702414327 97% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0806754221388 0.0887237588012 91% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0206378986867 0.0209618222197 98% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00750469043152 0.0139019557991 54% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2728.0 2387.08602151 114% => OK
No of words: 489.0 408.028673835 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.57873210634 5.86048508987 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.48200974243 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.292433537832 0.338922669872 86% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.19836400818 0.251872472559 79% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.134969325153 0.174417080927 77% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0838445807771 0.112833075102 74% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42882463621 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453987730061 0.524397521467 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 51.5920361064 59.2087087015 87% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6684587814 116% => OK
Sentence length: 20.375 20.5533526081 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.7252188385 48.84282405 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.666666667 120.699889404 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.375 20.5533526081 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.666666666667 0.644075263715 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.54480286738 162% => OK
Readability: 40.211400818 45.7405998639 88% => OK
Elegance: 1.05056179775 1.45489161554 72% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243642684985 0.300154397459 81% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0878810551536 0.103427244359 85% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0541752435431 0.0752933317313 72% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.477706916909 0.497263757937 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.105428553502 0.151897553556 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0942256340118 0.114077575197 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0590247841951 0.0781384742642 76% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.428342549362 0.336927656856 127% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0339918047472 0.067059652881 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167813805225 0.210909579961 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0355569241073 0.0618886996521 57% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8870967742 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.86379928315 207% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.91756272401 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 8.0 2.4623655914 325% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 20.0 13.6433691756 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.