Nations should suspend government funding for the arts when significant numbers of their citizens are hungry or unemployed.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning f

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Nations should suspend government funding for the arts when significant numbers of their citizens are hungry or unemployed.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

Submitted by Phoebe on Tue, 10/18/2016 - 01:48

Art has significant benefits in many areas, including the nation’s cultural identity and economic development. On the other hand, depending on local particular condition, the limited government funding should be primarily used urgent issues. However, even in such condition, the government funding should not be suspended completely. Thus, I disagree with the recommendation.

Art itself is one area of economics. Some arts such as theme parks, stage performances, museums, monuments, and sculpture attracts both tourists and local people. These are products in terms of economics and being consumed. In addition, people spend millions of dollars in movies, music, and designer handbags. Arts include more than one simply think of and creating a great deal of taxes and jobs. Moreover, arts boost imagination and creativity in people and thereby help individuals and companies compete with vitals. Adverting and marketing are two of the fields which largely rely on the ability of creativity enhanced by arts. If a nation suspends the government funding of arts, it will surely hamper its advancement, which could result in the loss of abundant taxes and job opportunities.

Additionally, government funding arts is required by the cultural necessity. Government funding helps preserve the legacies of arts, which helps people to appreciate their history and identities. For example, the museums, with civil war and Abraham Lincoln as the theme, display that American people are steadfast on defending the nation’s unity and fighting for protecting human rights. Moreover, arts carry the values of a nation and affect the attitudes of other nations towards it. For example, the Statue of Liberty symbolizes that the United States is a free country and respects human rights, which wins people’s respect and yearn. If a nation does what the recommend suggests, it will diminish the cultural power that arts carries domestically and internationally.

On the other hand, the specific allocation of the government funding may vary depending on the local condition. Surely, people’s right of living should be prior to the development of arts. In some particular regions where the local economic conditions are particularly bad and many people struggle for a living. Considering that government funding is limited, it should be primarily used to meet people’s most urgent and basic needs. The government funding of arts can temporarily give way to more vital areas in these particular regions. Nevertheless, considering a healthy society needs both material and spiritual development, government funding of arts must be sustained nationwide.
In conclusion, considering the benefits that arts provide, a nation should not stop funding arts. On the other hand, in some particular regions, many people still struggle for a living. In this case, the government funding should be focused on the basic needs of people and temporarily suspend the funding of arts only in certain regions. Hence, the recommendation is only reasonable in certain cases and not applicable nationwide.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...espect and yearn. If a nation does what the recommend suggests, it will diminish the cultural...
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... cases and not applicable nationwide.
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Discourse Markers used:
['hence', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'nevertheless', 'so', 'still', 'thus', 'for example', 'in addition', 'in conclusion', 'such as', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.293906810036 0.240241500013 122% => OK
Verbs: 0.129032258065 0.157235817809 82% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0878136200717 0.0880659088768 100% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0465949820789 0.0497285424764 94% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0143369175627 0.0444667217837 32% => OK
Prepositions: 0.109318996416 0.12292977631 89% => OK
Participles: 0.0376344086022 0.0406280797675 93% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.01834374691 2.79330140395 108% => OK
Infinitives: 0.00716845878136 0.030933414821 23% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0913978494624 0.0997080785238 92% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0215053763441 0.0249443105267 86% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0125448028674 0.0148568991511 84% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3108.0 2732.02544248 114% => OK
No of words: 474.0 452.878318584 105% => OK
Chars per words: 6.55696202532 6.0361032391 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.58838876751 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.432489451477 0.366273622748 118% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.352320675105 0.280924506359 125% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.257383966245 0.200843997647 128% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.175105485232 0.132149295362 133% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01834374691 2.79330140395 108% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 219.290929204 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504219409283 0.48968727796 103% => OK
Word variations: 58.4639952874 55.4138127331 106% => OK
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6194690265 136% => OK
Sentence length: 16.9285714286 23.380412469 72% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.1297885108 59.4972553346 59% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.0 141.124799967 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9285714286 23.380412469 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.674092028746 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.21349557522 38% => OK
Readability: 52.1606389391 51.4728631049 101% => OK
Elegance: 2.32075471698 1.64882698954 141% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.411631116189 0.391690518653 105% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0933268820268 0.123202303941 76% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0601784083899 0.077325440228 78% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.511228893364 0.547984918172 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.10649052107 0.149214159877 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.158854892166 0.161403998019 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.068153969554 0.0892212321368 76% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.428891009679 0.385218514788 111% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.144341064562 0.0692045440612 209% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.295173819043 0.275328986314 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.028657349023 0.0653680567796 44% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 10.4325221239 201% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.30420353982 57% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88274336283 82% => OK
Positive topic words: 19.0 7.22455752212 263% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.66592920354 55% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.70907079646 111% => OK
Total topic words: 24.0 13.5995575221 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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flaws:
When arguing in one side, need to consider another side. They are not separated. read the requirements:

In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

for example, we may argue in this way to fit the requirements:

1. maybe people who depend on arts are hungry or unemployed too

2. maybe funding for the arts is a small budget which will not affect the funding for hungry or unemployed people.

3. maybe funding for the arts is in a specific area where hungry or unemployed are not serious

4. maybe we can delay the funding for arts not suspend, till the condition becomes better

and more...

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 28 15
No. of Words: 474 350
No. of Characters: 2527 1500
No. of Different Words: 231 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.666 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.331 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.816 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 198 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 158 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 112 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 72 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.929 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.477 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.295 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.442 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.065 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5

Do you mean that, for example, in my essay, I should organize the paper like this,

1. Art itself is one area of economy.......adopting the recommendation will result in the the rate of unemployment etc.
2. Funding arts is required by cultural necessities....... adopting the recommendation will cultail the cultural power one nation has etc. One nations needs to improve their employment as well as their spiritual support.
3. (Concession) ?

So I should describing the possible circumstances in each of my three points(paragraph)? Should I have a concession part separately at all?
Thank very much!! I didn't know this. I thought, these tasks are worded differently but means the same thing, that is, two support posints, one concession point.

1. Art itself is one area of economy.......adopting the recommendation will result in the the rate of unemployment etc. //this is OK

2. Funding arts is required by cultural necessities....... adopting the recommendation will cultail the cultural power one nation has etc. One nations needs to improve their employment as well as their spiritual support. //This is not OK. It is not related to the topic

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So I should describing the possible circumstances in each of my three points(paragraph)? //Yes

Should I have a concession part separately at all? //No, not necessary

People can find 1000 possible circumstances to support the statement or against the statement. For us, we just need to find 3-4 circumstances to support or against it. Like we did above.

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That's the reason we ask to always support or against one side. but remember in the meantime another side is related.

Also, when I got the prompt, I looked at it as two parts to argue. I fist argume the " Nations should NOT suspend funding for the arts" (the first part of the prompt); then argue the second half that when people are under sever condition " when significant numbers of their citizens are hungry or unemployed," the government funding of arts can temporarily give way to the basic needs of people. Is it okay to do this? Or should I always argue about the prompt as a whole, for this one, always focus on the possible correlation between "funding arts" new "unemployment etc." ?