The reading passage states that in the United States, many employees desire to work for four days in a week instead of five days with the twenty percent lees salary than normal and this practice would benefit the economy of the company as well as the employees who opt for this option. The author provides three reasons to support the point. However, the professor explains that this won’t benefit the company as well as the life of the employees as stated in the reading and refutes each of the author’s point.
First, the reading claims that by giving four days work option,the company will get benefits as more rested and alert employees would work more efficiently for the eighty percent of their normal pay. So the company would not have to spend extra for hiring more staff to do work and this Way Company would get the economic benefit. But the professor states that the company would have to spend more for the training of the new employees as well as for their medical. The medical expense of four- day workers would remain the same. The Company would need more office space and computers for new employees so it would decrease the profit.
Second, the reading posits that the company would hire new employees which would reduce the unemployment rate in the country. However, the professor says that company may go for other options like overtime to the four- day working employees and the company may expect more from them to finish five days work in four days which would not bring additional jobs but the present job would become unpleasant.
Finally, the reading says that four days work employees would have more time for their families as well as for their other interesting activities. The professor refutes this point and says that it would decrease a quality of their life as they have less job stability because in the critical situation four days work employees would be fired first. Chances of getting promotions are also less as the company would select five days workers to ensure supervision for an entire workweek.
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No. of Words: 354 250
Write the essay in 20 minutes. this is too long:
the reading claims that by giving four days work option,the company will get benefits as more rested and alert employees would work more efficiently for the eighty percent of their normal pay. So the company would not have to spend extra for hiring more staff to do work and this Way Company would get the economic benefit.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 25 in 30
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 12
No. of Words: 354 250
No. of Characters: 1665 1200
No. of Different Words: 151 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.338 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.703 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.152 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 112 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 82 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 38 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 25 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.231 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.236 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.846 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.465 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.465 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.197 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
It was a grammar mistake so I corrected it.
Thanks.