The reading specifies three chief advantages of using electronic medical record. On the other hand, the lecturer casts doubts on the pros of electronic medical record. The information she represented is in direct contrast to facts outlined in the passage.
First, the reading states that the usage of the electronic format will curtail the cost since it does not require space, and can be easily transformed. On the contrary, the lecturer refutes the idea by imparting that most of the doctors do not throw away pen and papers. They use their hand-written prescription for emergency back up. Thus, the use of electronic medical record not only reduce the expenses but also augment them , for they should still pay for storage cost.
Second, according to the reading, the errors produced by conventional medical record can be abate significantly since no improper data would be collected. Conversely, the lecturer brings up the idea that most of the doctors, including those using electronic medical record, write their prescriptions through examination by pen and papers. They mostly delegate the work of inserting data to their staff. So, the use of electronic medical record can not eliminate the errors, for the staff still have to interpret hand writing of doctors.
Third, according to the reading, the accessible electronic medical record can be exploited for many researches. However, the lecturer asserts that the accessibility will not be beneficial for researches, for they have to pass many strict privacy laws. Many patients prefer to keep their medical information private. The consequence of this will be that they should ask for many permissions even from each patient. Moreover, it is not granted, because some patients may block the use of their information.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 429, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...educe the expenses but also augment them , for they should still pay for storage c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, still, third, thus, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 5.04856512141 218% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 12.0772626932 41% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1503.0 1373.03311258 109% => OK
No of words: 285.0 270.72406181 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27368421053 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75048619996 2.5805825403 107% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 145.348785872 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543859649123 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 459.0 419.366225166 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.7267734864 49.2860985944 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.9375 110.228320801 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8125 21.698381199 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.75 7.06452816374 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.432130432255 0.272083759551 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.152895578468 0.0996497079465 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10946714196 0.0662205650399 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.285372326111 0.162205337803 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0413146525648 0.0443174109184 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.3589403974 92% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.99 12.2367328918 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 63.6247240618 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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