This argument is about the impact of the lavender-scent pillow on a group of patients who are suffering from the insomnia. The author cites about those people who have some chronic difficulties with sleeping and for supporting his recommendation, he mentioned about a remedy with lavender flower that is really impressive for their problem. Although this treatment might have some benefit in an empirical environment, he can not provide valid and cogent reasons to strengthen his claims.
The first and the most important point is that the experiment is done only on a small group. This factor has some flaws. In fact, generalizing some results that work only on the 30 patients to all the people might not be convincing. Consider this group selected based on some concealed implications, for example, some families hereditary are suffering from sleeplessness, hence the results are true only for them. Moreover, all reliable studies have done in a larger group. As we know, millions people are suffering the insomnia, and thus, only a group that contains 30 persons can not be a logical representative of those people. In brief, to have a validate results, the editorial should offer more strong reasons and larger statistical society.
Moreover, the assumption that performing the experiment in the controlled room and circumstances needs to be justified by certifying the results in real world and normal places. This factor is ignored that the peaceful and wonderful place can be one of the most factor that has played a critical role in their well sleepiness. In fact, the author has forgotten to consider such an important cause of insomnia in his experiment. For example, some people have chronic sleeplessness because of being residence near the large and crowded highways or airports. Having done the study in controlled room cannot truly find the cause of insomnia and hence the remedy known as the scent of lavender flower might not that effective in their treatment.
One more critical problem with this argument is that this group of people abruptly discontinued their pervious medication. There is a possibility that their sudden act might cause the sleep that is more uncomfortable in the second week, but on the third week of the experiment their bodies try to adjust themselves to the new situation. As result, the author wrongly considers that the scent is impressive. Additionally, it should be noted that if this remedy can be effective based on scientific method and researches, most doctors might advise it to their patients.
From what have been discussed, it is clear that the author's claims are not well grounded and most of his results need to prove by more reliable data and larger group of study that considering different reasons of insomnia in real and normal world.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 650, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...tive of those people. In brief, to have a validate results, the editorial should offer mor...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, moreover, really, second, so, then, third, thus, well, as for, for example, in brief, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 28.8173652695 153% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2351.0 2260.96107784 104% => OK
No of words: 460.0 441.139720559 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11086956522 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81016501476 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 204.123752495 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463043478261 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 711.0 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.2404599907 57.8364921388 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.55 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8 5.70786347227 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198031473159 0.218282227539 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0599367688118 0.0743258471296 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0628893569851 0.0701772020484 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1190297325 0.128457276422 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0577121367818 0.0628817314937 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 98.500998004 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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