Asthma
The reading and the lecture both are about Asthma, an intermittent disorder characterized by temporary bouts of inflammation of the airways.The lecture provides additional information on the possible causes and symptoms of the condition, and also provides several reasons of support. However, the lecturer explains that new thinking on the fundamental causes have been brought up. He explains that the returning back of the airways has been under considerations for several doubts by introducing a term "Remodeling" and casts doubts on the claims made by the author.
Firstly, the author claims that certain factors causes the onset of the attack and after that the airways return to normal. This point is challenged by the lecturer. He says that the the intermediate stage of the attack is not been considered here. Furthermore he points out the in between the attack the airways may get permanently narrow and the wall get thickened, and this is due to remodeling which is a result of long term inflammation and scaring over a period of time.
Secondly, the author mentions about some primary causes of the conditions wherein he explains the basic working of the symptom of the asthma. The lecturer on the other hand, says that remodeling is the result and possible cause of the condition. He puts forth the idea of the observation on young children which showed that they already have remodeled airways which shows that it is not only the consequence of asthma but also an underlying cause. In addition, he says that the important factors that influences remodeling are genetics as well as environment. As it has been observed in some men that this conditions was developed in them even before birth which shows that environment plays an important role.
In conclusion, the lecturer effectively casts doubt on all the claims and theories presented in the reading.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ry bouts of inflammation of the airways.The lecture provides additional information...
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...e been brought up. He explains that the returning back of the airways has been under considera...
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...ubts on the claims made by the author. Firstly, the author claims that certain ...
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...hallenged by the lecturer. He says that the the intermediate stage of the attack is not...
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...hallenged by the lecturer. He says that the the intermediate stage of the attack is not...
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...the attack is not been considered here. Furthermore he points out the in between the attack...
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...ng term inflammation and scaring over a period of time. Secondly, the author mentions abo...
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...ion and scaring over a period of time. Secondly, the author mentions about some...
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..., says that remodeling is the result and possible cause of the condition. He puts...
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...ng are genetics as well as environment. As it has been observed in some men that t...
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...t environment plays an important role. In conclusion, the lecturer effectively ...
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... and theories presented in the reading.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, may, second, secondly, so, well, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 22.412803532 112% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 30.3222958057 139% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.01324503311 199% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1573.0 1373.03311258 115% => OK
No of words: 307.0 270.72406181 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12377850163 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97364344848 2.5805825403 115% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 145.348785872 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508143322476 0.540411800872 94% => OK
syllable_count: 477.9 419.366225166 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 3.25607064018 154% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.0194127363 49.2860985944 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.0 110.228320801 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6153846154 21.698381199 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.3846153846 7.06452816374 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 4.19205298013 286% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.104085244959 0.272083759551 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0349100745616 0.0996497079465 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0648957080195 0.0662205650399 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0533913445652 0.162205337803 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0565795186062 0.0443174109184 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.3589403974 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 53.8541721854 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.0289183223 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 63.6247240618 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.7273730684 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.2008830022 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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