The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
“On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island’s moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville’s town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals.”
In the letter, the writer suggests that the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds in order to reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians. He takes the example of the neighboring island of Seaville as an example to explain the efficiency of his recommendation. After carefully examining the reasons, we may ask some questions about the suggestion.
First of all, the writer points out that the number of mopeds as a popular form of transportation resulting in accidents should be limited on Balmer Island in the Summer months, in which the population increases to 100000. This means that the use of the mopeds during the Summer months of the dramatically rising population leads to the accidents on the island. However, though the population rises, do they bring about the accidents ignoring the safety awareness? Don’t they choose other tools of transportation, except mopeds? Are the Summer months the major months of accidents? Spring? Autumn? And winter? Furthermore, other tool of transportation, though it is not popular, may be the main object to give rise to the accidents on Balmer Island.
Secondly, the number of mopeds rented by the island’s moped rental companies is limited to 25 per day from 50 per day in order to attain the 50% annual moped accidents during the summer season. Does the prohibition take effect? Perhaps, people buy mopeds instead of rent, and the number of mopeds used every day may increase to more than 50. Most importantly, what does the ban suggested by the writer depend on? Is the volume of traffic on Bamler Island only 50 sets of mopeds per day? Is it the best the measure that the town council limits the number of mopeds rented by the island’s moped rental companies to reduce moped accidents? Can’t the town council take traffic control measures to improve traffic flows or other ways rather than the ban mentioned by the writer?
Finally, the writer says that the neighboring island of Seaville obtained its 50% annual reduction in moped accidents by limiting the number of rentals last year. Is it sure that Balmer Island can achieve the same effect if the town council takes the same measure? Maybe, there is no effect on Balmer, for the traffic situations of two islands are completely different—the roads of Balmer Island are very stiff and rugged, but that of Seaville is quite the opposite. Moreover, the town council of Seaville island may take auxiliary steps to reduce moped accidents, for example, they arrange more staffs to keep the traffic order in the summer season.
As a result, according to the information supplied by the writer, it isn’t enough to persuade the town council of Balmer Island to limit the number of mopeds rented by the island’s moped rental companies in order to reduce the accidents caused by mopeds. To support the recommendation, the writer should provide more data about the moped-pedestrian accident rate in all the accidents on Balmer Island, give more facts on implementing the limitation of rental mopeds on Seaville Island for the Balmer island reference.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 181, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...n the 50% annual moped accidents during the summer season. Does the prohibition take effect? Perh...
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Line 4, column 632, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...ore staffs to keep the traffic order in the summer season. As a result, according to the inform...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, for example, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 84.0 55.5748502994 151% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2612.0 2260.96107784 116% => OK
No of words: 517.0 441.139720559 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05222437137 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76839952204 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76984347811 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 204.123752495 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.433268858801 0.468620217663 92% => OK
syllable_count: 801.9 705.55239521 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.471057884232 212% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.6672890234 57.8364921388 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.727272727 119.503703932 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.54545454545 5.70786347227 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 6.88822355289 203% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.40558538254 0.218282227539 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129670805438 0.0743258471296 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10101535127 0.0701772020484 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.262571583924 0.128457276422 204% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0695235639324 0.0628817314937 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 98.500998004 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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