Issue: Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term and realistic goals rather than immediate fame and recognition.
Young people should be encouraged to pursue the long-term goals to achieve success.Setting long-tem goals helps one to be always happy in his life.Immediate fame maybe short-lived.A person who suddenly becomes famous may be recognised only for a short period of time.He may become complacent after his success and may stop setting further goals for the progress and improvement of his life .The sudden rise to fame may not help him in the long run.
A sudden fame can mislead man and tempt him to take the path which seemingly looks easy but actually turns out to be deleterious for him for it paves way for his destruction.One should not bask in the glory of a sudden fame.They become prodigal and waste their time and money by getting addicted to the various immoral activities.We have examples of many celebrities who rose to fame for a short period of time.They wasted their life by becoming prey to the many sins of life.
Hard work and perseverance are the keys to success.The fruits of hard labor are sweet.A person works hard to accomplish his goals.He learns to appreciate the setbacks and failures he may encounter while working hard to attain his goals.Long-term goals teach one to properly schedule his activities and he himself can carve out the path for his life.He learns to live his life and learns to be patient.
In this age of cut-throat competition,setting short-term goals doesn't help one to reach anywhere in the rat race.Darwin's theory of "the survival of the fittest" holds very true in today's world..Long-term goals help one better in the long run.He starts working towards the attainment of the goals and such time is well-spent rather than a short-lived success.
Setting such goals teaches one the many values and lessons of life.It helps him become systematic and more professional.Hence it is very important that the young people today are encouraged to set long-tem goals and work towards attaining those goals.
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Sentence: A sudden fame can mislead man and tempt him to take the path which seemingly looks easy but actually turns out to be deleterious for him for it paves way for his destruction.One should not bask in the glory of a sudden fame.
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Sentence: A person who suddenly becomes famous may be recognised only for a short period of time.He may become complacent after his success and may stop setting further goals for the progress and improvement of his life .
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