How many of us, who are parent, has to deal with a tantrum of our children disapointed because we have to reject his or her demand for a new toy? Where is this desire coming from? Yes, television advertising, most frecuently. Thus, I strongly agree with the statement proposed above that states television advertising direc to young children should not be allowed. The reason is simple, advertising in young children provokes a strong desire of products that can not being satified by parents, provoking the disapointement and insatisfaction of both, children and parents.
First of all, the brain of a child is far from being mature at the age of two to five years old. Consecuently, the information received from advertising and propaganda is not processed in the correct way. Moreover, at that short age many kids assume that the exaggeration in the message, usually present in advertising, is accurate and actually real. For example, a company that wants to remark that is selling a biggest candy in the market can show the product as big as a person. An adult would understand that it is not true, but an exaggeration, but not a child.
Additionally, the inmmature mind of a child can distort his or her desire in an addiction. To illustrate this point, let's review the last campains of Pokemon products. The company is the owner of a brand that constantly is updating characters and games, to keep the consumption of the products in a high level. Furthermore, if it is difficult, even for some adult to resist the temptation of buying more Pokemon's products and games, much more would be for a little child. For this reason, I strongly suggest not to expose young children to advertising.
Finally, I think it is important for parents to understand who are behing the advertising. Usually, companies whose goal is increase their incomes. That is the real motive behind of a creative idea of an advertising, and not to take care of the children target of the massage. Thus, is not to blame who promote a brand, but who control these companies and regulate the advertising whose targets are children. In fact, I deeply belive that while this controls and regulations are not implemented, parents should not allow children to be exposed to advertising.
In conclusion, in review of all the reasons exposed above, I strongly sustain that television advertising direct toward young children should not be allowed. In fact, parent should also demand the goberment to implement stronger regulations regarding this issue.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 17, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
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Line 3, column 412, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...ny that wants to remark that is selling a biggest candy in the market can show th...
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Line 7, column 60, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
... is important for parents to understand who are behing the advertising. Usually, compan...
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Line 7, column 446, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...en. In fact, I deeply belive that while this controls and regulations are not implem...
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Line 9, column 159, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...d young children should not be allowed. In fact, parent should also demand the gob...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, furthermore, if, moreover, regarding, so, thus, while, as to, for example, i think, in conclusion, in fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 55.5748502994 103% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2109.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 423.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98581560284 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91602557978 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510638297872 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 650.7 705.55239521 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.471057884232 637% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4153522858 57.8364921388 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.8636363636 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2272727273 23.324526521 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.13636363636 5.70786347227 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228604270576 0.218282227539 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.062969740753 0.0743258471296 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0921897393309 0.0701772020484 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135638807476 0.128457276422 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0879118544618 0.0628817314937 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 98.500998004 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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