There is no doubt that people need to enjoy life and when people get old, some of arguments said that they lose their young soul which is dying for leisure time.However, some of people do not. So, I am inclined to believe that when people get older their priority changes. I will explain my arguments below.
First, when we are three or five our only responsibility is to take care of turtle or cat and we were on game age, when our parents were thinking jobs and responsibility. Then, we grown up we became 15 and we were still free, exams were on board but we did not care so much about them because having fun with friends and playing playstation was a crucial to us. At the same time, my parents got credit from bank to afford my university fee and stopped doing holiday for summers until I was 20. So, I am trying to explain that young people have less responsilibity than older people and young people can spend their time for leisure activities.
Second, what is the difference between 23 years old university students and retired 65 grandmother? Money, health or technology knowledge. We cannot deny that we born lucky. when I was 5 my father bought me the Atari, I played more than months with my friend and I cannot ignore that I had fun but my grandmother always do not understand how to hunt the duck on front of the TV. Nowadays, Smartphone technology changed our life vision and entertainment, we use tinder to match, whatsapp to communicate and facetime to see each other wherever we are. However, older people's entertainment is still the same and they still do not dwell for fun. I strongly believe that 40 years later, we are not going to understand next generations and they will enjoy life more than us.
To sum up, life is a long way journey which has a different steps. İn every steps we lose our aspect of entertainment and adapt ourself to serious things like marriage or work. So, young people have an opportunity to enjoy life without any responsibility.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 75, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'some of', you should use 'the' ('some of the arguments') or simply say ''some arguments''.
Suggestion: some of the arguments; some arguments
... to enjoy life and when people get old, some of arguments said that they lose their young soul wh...
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Line 1, column 162, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
...ng soul which is dying for leisure time.However, some of people do not. So, I am inclin...
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Line 1, column 171, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'some of', you should use 'the' ('some of the people') or simply say ''some people''.
Suggestion: some of the people; some people
...hich is dying for leisure time.However, some of people do not. So, I am inclined to believe th...
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Line 2, column 180, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[1]
Message: Possible grammatical error. You used a past participle without using any required verb ('be' or 'have'). Did you mean 'grew'?
Suggestion: grew
...nking jobs and responsibility. Then, we grown up we became 15 and we were still free...
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Line 2, column 201, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sibility. Then, we grown up we became 15 and we were still free, exams were on bo...
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Line 2, column 569, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ung people have less responsilibity than older people and young people can spend ...
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Line 3, column 88, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'grandmother' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'grandmothers'.
Suggestion: grandmothers
... old university students and retired 65 grandmother? Money, health or technology knowledge....
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Line 3, column 174, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: When
...dge. We cannot deny that we born lucky. when I was 5 my father bought me the Atari, ...
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Line 3, column 410, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the TV. Nowadays, Smartphone technology changed our life vision and entertainmen...
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Line 5, column 61, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'step'?
Suggestion: step
... long way journey which has a different steps. İn every steps we lose our aspect of e...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, so, still, then, well, no doubt, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1632.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 356.0 407.700716846 87% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58426966292 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63824316145 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573033707865 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 4.0 0.994623655914 402% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.496812465 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.0 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9411764706 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.41176470588 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286148916287 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0886706765458 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104687080625 0.0737576698707 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189000058558 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.058127848915 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.98 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 86.8835125448 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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