Advanced technology has brought significant number of advantages to human beings' life. Some believe that our ancestors have better and more convenient life than ours. Others, on the other hand, have different perspective, preferring to have the current lifestyle than living in the past. I am of the latter opinion, since modern technology has causes tremendous positive changes towards our life, making it more interested and comfortable. Given that notion, changes in transportation systems, effective medicines and a broad range of entertainment can be named of few factors which make our life easier than the past.
To start with, in the past people have a limited option of transport. These days, the means of transport have been improving and providing a comfortable and inexpensive transportation systems, such as buses, trains and mono-rail systems. In the past, people were commute using inefficiency automobiles which were emitted a considerable amount of pollution to the environment. In contrast, the advanced automobile industry are now very environmentally friendly and even some companies like Toyota offer hybrid cars which use electricity as fuel. Moreover, innovative technology and discoveries of medicines have gone a long way towards the reduction of mortality rate and have provided us to live longer. In the past, there were considerable contagious and dangerous disease and people were lost their lives because of insufficient medicines. These days, people can survive even if they are diagnosed of cancer. As these examples have shown, technology has caused our life more blissful and comfortable than the life of our grandparents.
In addition, nowadays, people have more leisure time and can enjoy their life more than our ancestors could. Most of works have now performing by computers and there is not required to undertake physical activities to complete a job. Therefore, people can complete their job at ease and quick which has brought a lot of spare time. There are number of entertainments such as theatre, shopping, sport events and travelling. These options were limited in the past. Nowadays, people can watch international sports events like Olympics with their 24 inch plasma televisions compared to the small black and white TVs of the past. They even can easily book a flight and attend the sport events. The option which is now available because of advanced and fast airplanes. Some people may say that in the past, people feel less stress and pressure compared to the level of stress which we now experience. It should be noticed that most jobs in the past were related to the agriculture and farmers were very dependent on the weather. If weather was not appropriate for crops, they might lose their lands and could not survive. With the advanced agriculture systems such as greenhouses, we now can have every kind of fruits during a year. Therefore, there were also pressure and strains in the past. These strains can be now experienced in our jobs. However, the huge number of entertainments and travel amenities have caused our life comfortable and pleasure.
In conclusion, I personally believe that advanced technology has gone a long way towards making our life easier and more comfortable by development of airplanes, automobiles, trains, medicine and offering us outstanding entertainments. These amenities were not available for our grandparents and we should thank technology for making our life awesome.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 75, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'beings'' or 'being's'?
Suggestion: beings'; being's
...gnificant number of advantages to human beings life. Some believe that our ancestors h...
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Line 5, column 110, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Most of', you should use 'the' ('Most of the works') or simply say ''Most works''.
Suggestion: Most of the works; Most works
...eir life more than our ancestors could. Most of works have now performing by computers and th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, even so, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, kind of, such as, to start with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 13.8261648746 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2923.0 1977.66487455 148% => OK
No of words: 550.0 407.700716846 135% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31454545455 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84273464058 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92580482676 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 268.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487272727273 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 921.6 618.680645161 149% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.3448830762 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.4333333333 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.96666666667 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116601426505 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0352929363046 0.076458572812 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0346675588887 0.0737576698707 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0873735436737 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0153211802709 0.0645574589148 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 86.8835125448 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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