Writing task I (General)
You were hurt in a minus accident inside a supermarket, and you wish to complain to the supermarket.
Write a letter to the manager of the supermarket. In your letter :
* Say who you are.
* Give details about the accident.
* Suggest how the supermarket could present similar accident.
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am one of your coustemers bearing member number:26314. I am writing this letter tp let you know about my accident that I got your supermarket 3 days ago.
Almost every day, i come to your famous supermarket on 56 Jason Road, Auckland, On 27th July 2013, at 03:00 pm, I visited your place with my sister and her three children . it was normal day for me, until one small accident happend to me. When i was searching some milk bottles in food section, i felt on the floar. the place was not far from cashier number thrird. I was shy because every body saw me. I did not see a sign board which nothicec buyers, if there are wet places. My palm hand was blending. Even though it was not hurt, by the accident, my fingers could not move for while and it was akward. I was angry because no body specially shop attendants did not help me.
Finally, In the future you had better to manage cleaning workers to be better. In addition, you should check your supermarket regularly. Thank you for your attention I am looking for your respons soon.
Your Faithfully
Suryo Firmanto.
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Sentence: I am one of your coustemers bearing member number:26314.
Error: coustemers Suggestion: customers
Sentence: Almost every day, i come to your famous supermarket on 56 Jason Road, Auckland, On 27th July 2013, at 03:00 pm, I visited your place with my sister and her three children . it was normal day for me, until one small accident happend to me.
Error: happend Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: When i was searching some milk bottles in food section, i felt on the floar. the place was not far from cashier number thrird.
Error: thrird Suggestion: third
Error: floar Suggestion: floor
Sentence: I did not see a sign board which nothicec buyers, if there are wet places.
Error: nothicec Suggestion: notice
Sentence: Even though it was not hurt, by the accident, my fingers could not move for while and it was akward.
Error: akward Suggestion: awkward
Sentence: Thank you for your attention I am looking for your respons soon.
Error: respons Suggestion: No alternate word
flaws:
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 12 9
No. of Words: 195 200
No. of Characters: 813 900
No. of Different Words: 132 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.737 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.169 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.237 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 50 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 32 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 18 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 9 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.449 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.417 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.39 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.551 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.205 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4