Some people believe that the charity organizations should give aid to those in greatest need wherever they live Some people believe that the charity organizations would better concentrate on helping people who live in own country instead Discuss both view

Sentence: In fact ,many rich countries charity organization have moved to help poor countries ,such as Africa .
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Sentence: In the western, has the proverb :you are not island so the charity organizations could share their charities with others nation and it would definitely balance the distribution of wealth in the world.
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Sentence: First of all,even if in richer countries also have poor people and homelessness.If domestic charity organization fail to take fully into account people in their own county it will also lead to the gap between rich and poor.
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Sentence: In conclusion, charity organization is type of non-profit organization and we should appreciate its help that make the world better.
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It has been always an interesting debate whether charity organizations should assist people of the country of their origin, however, some people support the idea that these types of bodies should help across the globe to whoever in extreme need. In my opinion, the financial assistance should be given to any needy people regardless of their geographic locations.
On one hand, charity organizations are bound to support local people of the country as a first priority. In fact, government mentions this clause in the legal agreement with these type of companies at the time of the necessary approvals. There are lot of advantages to state by doing so for example, the poverty rate will be alleviated by helping local poor public of the country. Secondly, people will be able to do any small business by receiving this financial assistance and lastly, crime rate will be controlled by engaging the needy citizens in some work.
On the flip side, there are some people who support the idea that the charity organization should support to any person whoever in extreme need despite of the nationality or citizenship. The first and foremost reason for this thought is that’s some undeveloped countries do not have these types of organizations to help their poor residents. This situation sometime give rise to a lot of issues like spreading of uncontrollable diseases, crime and corruption in that region and which are further propagated to other nearby countries and thus affecting whole world like slow poison.
In conclusion, aim of charity organization should be to minimize poverty and enabling the common people to contribute their part in secure, stable and healthy environment around the world.