TPO-24 - Integrated Writing Task Animal fossils usually provide very little opportunity to study the actual animal tissues, because in fossils the animals' living tissues have been largely replaced by minerals. Thus, scientists were very excited recently

The lecturer and the reading passage discussing about seventy million year old fossil of Tyrannosaurus rex. According to the article, log bone of the T. rex fossil materials reveal like blood vessels, red blood cells and collagen matrix. However, the lecturer refutes each research presents in reading passage and he doubt about the identification of material by researcher.
Firstly, the article emphasizes that fossil of the leg bone contains channel structure and soft flexible substance represents that its blood vessel of T. rex. The lecturer, in contrast, mentions that soft substances are not blood vessels but something else. When organism died then, bacteria formed colony. Moist residue and soft substances are trace of bacteria colony. Therefore, article claims were not true.
Secondly, the reading passage implies that inner bone fossil presents sphere which size and red color shown that its blood vessel of T. rex dinosaur. The lecturer, on contrary, explains that iron like structure was also found in the prime fossil. This iron like material not irons but it was reddish mineral material.
Lastly, the article claims that collagen found by testing of leg bone. The lecturer argues to this point and states that collagen was not found even 1000 years old fossil, so it is improbable idea that collagen found in 70 million old fossil because collage not long last living tissue. The resources might come from the human skin, the researcher who handles the fossil bone.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 318, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'doubts'.
Suggestion: doubts
...arch presents in reading passage and he doubt about the identification of material by...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 22.412803532 71% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 30.3222958057 76% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1251.0 1373.03311258 91% => OK
No of words: 239.0 270.72406181 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23430962343 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.93187294222 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42921533954 2.5805825403 94% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 145.348785872 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564853556485 0.540411800872 105% => OK
syllable_count: 372.6 419.366225166 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.116997792494 855% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 21.2450331126 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.7156529644 49.2860985944 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.4 110.228320801 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9333333333 21.698381199 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.53333333333 7.06452816374 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.27373068433 187% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.435769331428 0.272083759551 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133227496143 0.0996497079465 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0966862198616 0.0662205650399 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.250300661331 0.162205337803 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0212419427604 0.0443174109184 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.3589403974 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 53.8541721854 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.42419426049 100% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 63.6247240618 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.498013245 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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