Children today play very violent games. This must be the reason for the increase in violence and crime in most major cities of the world.
What are your opinions on this?
It is fact that, today’s children are involved in dangerous games which increase the rate of crime. This unconscious crime committed by little-aged children considerably increases in some contemporary cities.
It is not easy to keep an eye on your children, especially when you are busy with another issues at home. Children are interested almost in everything at home. However, they are not capable of distinguish toys or appropriate tools for playing and another things which can cause unwillingly bad accident at home. The most important fact about it is to watch violent videos on TV and figh...
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Sentence: It is not easy to keep an eye on your children, especially when you are busy with another issues at home.
Description: The word issues is not usually used as a verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
Suggestion: another issue or other issues
Sentence: However, they are not capable of distinguish toys or appropriate tools for playing and another things which can cause unwillingly bad accident at home.
Suggestion: another thing or other things
Sentence: As a result of watching such programmes every child could want to put it into practise.
Description: A preposition is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: to put it into practice
flaws:
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Need at least two paragraphs for essay body. Conclusion paragraph can be shorter. like this:
para 1: introduction. my opinion: A or B. agree or disagree
para 2: reason 1
para 3: reason 2
para 4: reason 3 (optional)
para 5: conclusion
You are on the right track, better organizing the contents will make the essay 7.5 or over next time.
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 333 350
No. of Characters: 1594 1500
No. of Different Words: 183 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.272 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.787 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.541 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 103 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 86 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.65 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.271 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.4 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.289 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.409 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.124 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5