Many countries obtain financial benefits via tourism but there are also some negative effects. State the causes for the negative effects and suggest possible solutions.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Tourism can encourage people to experience other countrys' culture and lifestyle. Many countries are obtaining financial benefits through their tourism industries. However, there are negative effects of active tourism. This essay will outline the advantages and disadvantages of tourism industry, as well as potential solutions.
Despite financial benefits, tourism industry also accompanies many risks to the nation. Developing a local area for tourism can disrupt the authenticity of the area and make the region commercialized. As an example, Jeju Island was well known for its beautiful atmosphere and traditional custom. However, as a result of the development of the tourism industry, many areas were modernized and facilities were built for the convenience of tourists. Jeju Island has lost its traditional roots in many areas, which is a detrimental loss for the nation. Thus, it is evident that thereare risks brought about by tourism.
There need to be efforts to protect the environment and traditional artefacts from the potential damage due to tourism. Firstly, policies and regulations need to be in place to preserve cultural hometown and protect the local environment. Also, imposing heavy fines is essential when such areas are demaged to warn other people not to behave same. In addition, construction should be banned in such areas to pass it down to our descendants. I argue such policies are important to avoid risks of the tourism industry.
In short, the tourism industry is an important national budget resource and needs to be encourage. However, though its advantages, there are damages to the nation in terms of preservation. By enacting regulations and policies, we can prevent devastating and maintain our precious resources for the futher generation.
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Essay evaluation report
other countrys' culture and lifestyle.
other countries' cultures and lifestyles.
and needs to be encourage.
and needs to be encouraged.
though its advantages, there are damages to the nation
through its advantages, there are damages to the nation
though it has advantages, there are damages to the nation
Sentence: Thus, it is evident that thereare risks brought about by tourism.
Error: thereare Suggestion: therefore
Sentence: Also, imposing heavy fines is essential when such areas are demaged to warn other people not to behave same.
Error: demaged Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: By enacting regulations and policies, we can prevent devastating and maintain our precious resources for the futher generation.
Error: futher Suggestion: father
flaws:
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.333 21.0 //more complex and compound sentences wanted.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 276 350
No. of Characters: 1468 1500
No. of Different Words: 153 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.076 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.319 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.875 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 115 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 3.873 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.611 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.316 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.506 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.078 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, so, then, thus, well, as to, in addition, in short, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1513.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 276.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48188405797 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07593519647 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99392676238 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56884057971 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 22.6465733379 49.4020404114 46% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 84.0555555556 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3333333333 20.7667163134 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11111111111 7.06120827912 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185363803983 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0623777912106 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0571699401918 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111773033313 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0746085414431 0.056905535591 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 50.2224549098 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.91 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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