Schools are spending more time teaching traditional subjects such as history. Some people think they should rather spend more time in teaching skill that can help students find a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree.
School education is a balanced combination of traditional subject and physical skill to achieve a higher level of success in real life. While some argue that more time needs to be spent on cultural subjects, other believe that more emphasis should be given on practical skills. In my opinion, helping the students to acquire new techniques should be a priority of any educational institute. Analysing the benefits in getting jobs to finance the education and to obtain a secure future will prove this.
Firstly, skills can help students to acquire many high paid jobs in order to finance higher studies. In America and European countries, it is expected from students to do jobs in order to support themselves while studying. For instance, we see a lot of small wood crafts being sold on the internet nowadays by the students, such products are cheap and high in demand. This intern gives the students an opportunity utilise time in a productive manner and make money from it. Thus concludes that, If utilised wisely, it can prove to be beneficial.
Secondly, for some cultures, it is expected for the young ones to support the family financially, form an early age. In many South Asian countries, this practice is very common. Schools in such cases can provide effective programmes to learn some easy but vital skills. For example, short mechanical courses in Pakistan is a part of curricula. These courses help the youngsters to get jobs even after high school and supporting the families. This argument proves our opinion.
Nevertheless, traditional subject knowledge is also important to learn. A good knowledge of history helps students to understand the culture and be a good member of society, But the benefits are far less than other practical subjects.
To sum up, in my opinion, the financial aspect and job security give skills a preference over the regular subject. Thus it is agreed that such knowledge should be stressed more in institutes. In future, the government should finance schools and colleges to make such practical facilities available for everyone.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for example, for instance, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1737.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 342.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07894736842 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72627696591 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570175438596 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 549.0 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.0425514415 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.85 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.55 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228503717362 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0636572751791 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0471103367416 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124029280479 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0459880689726 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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