In the preceding statement the author asserts that Adams Realty is much better than Fitch Realty, based on the numebr of agents, average revenue and the time needed to sell a house. The argument may seems quite tenable at first glance, however, upon careful scrutiny, it is rife with flaws and premises.
To begin with, the author claims Adams real estate company is definitely superior to Fitch becase it has 15 more agents and longer working hours. Although this may hint that Adams Realty is better, more investigation must be carried out. The number of agents is a measurement of the company, but other factors such as service quality and working efficiency must be taken into consideration, too. It is likely that Fitch provides much better services to its customers although it has less agents compared to Adams.
Additionally, building upon the implication that the average home sales for Adams was 168,000 last year, much higher than Fitch's at 144,000, the author suggests that Adams is better. However, we all know that house price is greatly affected with the location. There's possibility that Fitch focuses on rural area and city-skirts, while Adams focuses on city center to avoid competition. So it is the higher house price, rather than the number of house sold that contributed to Adams's higher income. It would be much more rational to compare the number of houses sold instead of average avenue.
Last but not least, Adams is believed to sell houses in a much shorter time than Fitch. The author asserts her house was sold by Adams in only one month, while Fitch took four months ten years ago. The assumption here is that the two houses sold were of equal quality and the market was the same too. However, it is obvious that after ten years' development, the area in which the author lives have changed greatly, perhaps becoming more attractive to house buyers. What's more, if the second house was in much better condition compared to the first one, it would undoubtly be more attractive. Thus, the author's argument based on his or her own experience is non-persuasive at all. To strengthen his or her argument, the author should calculate the average time needed for a house to be sold by each agent during the same period of time.
Due to the aforementioned evidences, although the author mentioned some factors that contribute to a better realty agent, the reasons are not deeply investigated or are full of assumptions. As a result, only with more vigorous and thorough analysis can we know which realty agents, Adams or Fitch, is better.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 484, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun agents is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...rvices to its customers although it has less agents compared to Adams. Additional...
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Line 5, column 261, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: There's
... is greatly affected with the location. Theres possibility that Fitch focuses on rural...
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Line 7, column 466, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
...coming more attractive to house buyers. Whats more, if the second house was in much b...
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Line 7, column 603, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...undoubtly be more attractive. Thus, the authors argument based on his or her own experi...
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Line 7, column 821, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...o be sold by each agent during the same period of time. Due to the aforementioned evidences...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, so, then, thus, while, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2136.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 436.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89908256881 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50583864959 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 204.123752495 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504587155963 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 669.6 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.6906515223 57.8364921388 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 106.8 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8 5.70786347227 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183169275677 0.218282227539 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.061599318539 0.0743258471296 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0702568421077 0.0701772020484 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122946335189 0.128457276422 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.042831255557 0.0628817314937 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.3799401198 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 98.500998004 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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