keeping animals in captivity is cruel. there is no reason for zoos to exist in the 21st century. how do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
In the catastrophic world, benevolence has been decreased. There are many kind of effort which firstly conducted to human kind becoming materialistic. Animal conservation program is one of them. For the first time it was constructed to support wildlife from the extinction, but nowadays it become business area.
Keeping animal in cage is cruel. It make they cannot feel like in their home. They not live in their natural ecosystem. Their new generation which born in the zoo will never feel their real habitat. For example, the Lion baby live in the zoo, which should be as a king of the jungle, suppose to be the top carnivore in food chain. However, in the cage of the zoo, they cannot become one. In addition, their adaptation skill decreased.
on the other hand, breeding animal in the animal park still necessary. Because any zoo have offer new trend way to provide the animal natural approach. For example, there are Safari park in Bogor and Jawa Timur park in East Java which allow animal move freely. According to the Journal of Wildlife, animal live in that kind of zoo which designed like natural life growth like in their own world. They can run, roar, and hunt like in the jungle.
Moreover, there are advantages from the animal park, such as they can guide the existence of scare animals. They can be extinct when they live in their own world because of human exploitation. It also can be educating media for the children, as they can observe how beasts supposed to live in real environment.
In summaries, zoos existence is needed, but in different face. Nevertheless there is no prototype of zoo which represent of zoo which represent the real wild world.
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