Nowadays it is easier to maintain good health than in the past
More recently, people experience ever increasing development of human society, they are living longer than the past according to the statistic data. I think there are two factors including more healthy diet and regularly physical exericise contribute to our longeivity extension.
As for healthy diet, more and more people preparing food no longer consider the cost, but pay attention to the nutritious value of food. In specific, the bread, milk, rice and many daily foods contain large sum of nutritients like protein, minerals and vitamins while contain less calories which result in our weight gain. Moreover, new positions like nutrition scientist and manager give us a huge assistance on our daily food choice. For example, in our school cafeteria, nutrition manager will help chef choose the sources of food and combine them in a more nutritious way. Thanks to their efforts, the risk of diease caused by unhealty diet like diabetes and heart attack are largely cut off. We could thus concentrate more on our study and work.
When it comes to the regularly physical exericise, ever increaing number of gym around our work place will provide help. For example, the membership cards in many gyms forced us to exercise every day or in regular condition because no one wants to waste large sum of money. Moreover, the training faculties in gyms enable us to gain our muscle in a right way so that we are less possible get hurt. As a result, we lose our weight and build our muscles in a more effective and skillful way.
In general, mordern advanced way of food manufacture and physical exercise provide us more effective devices to build our body. These kind of technogies, I think, will definetely extend our longevity.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 276, Rule ID: LESS_DOLLARSMINUTESHOURS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer calories'?
Suggestion: fewer calories
...in, minerals and vitamins while contain less calories which result in our weight gain. Moreov...
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Line 2, column 276, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun calories is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...in, minerals and vitamins while contain less calories which result in our weight gai...
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Line 3, column 344, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a right way" with adverb for "right"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...es in gyms enable us to gain our muscle in a right way so that we are less possible get hurt. ...
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Line 4, column 129, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'These kinds'?
Suggestion: This kind; These kinds
...re effective devices to build our body. These kind of technogies, I think, will definetely...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, so, thus, while, as for, for example, i think, in general, kind of, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1439.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 289.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97923875433 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56507129757 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.608996539792 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 460.8 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.1714158843 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.785714286 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6428571429 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0176387385221 0.236089414692 7% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00737064180951 0.076458572812 10% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0265752269773 0.0737576698707 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0182449654204 0.150856017488 12% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0316012070905 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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