While it might be true that Buckinghum College ought to expand its space for accomadating and attracting more incoming students, making the author\'s argument fairly plausible, a closer scrutiny reveals that the argument is not substantiated by the evidence proffered in the memo.
To begin with, the author asserts that Buchingham College should construct new dormitories because the number of students is predicted to double in the next 50 years. This is problematic because it is really difficult to prescience how many students will there be in that long period of time. Although the school\'s enrollments are growing currently, this trend is not likely to persist for 50 years.
What is more, adducing the rising cost for renting an apartment in the town, the director of student housing concludes that off-campus housing is less affordable for students. It is not clear that, however, whether the students really find it difficult to live off-campus. In fact, many colleges and universities lies in less rich communities, and the expenditure for off-campus housing can even be lower than that for on-campus ones. Before any further evidence regarding the price for housing in nearby regions is offered, the author\'s argument simply does not stand.
Last but not least, we do not know whether new dormitories would be attractive for prospective students or not. When choosing which college to apply for, there are a plethora of things students need to consider, teaching quality and reputation of the college being top of them. The author neither convincingly show that the conditions of dormitories are taken seriously by applicants, nor does he or she elucidate how the new dormitories can be a truly fancy attraction standing out among many other factors that sway the students' decisions.
In conclusion, the director of student housing at Buckingham College sees it imperative to build new and attractive dormitories, claiming that students are growing and off-campus housing is getting more expensive. But the memo lacks concrete evidence to espouse the argument, which does not necessitate the building plan at all.
- TPO-18 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 66
- The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing."During the past year, Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than 75
- TPO-16 - Integrated Writing Task The United Kingdom (sometimes referred to as Britain) has a long and rich history of human settlement. Traces of buildings, tools, and art can be found from periods going back many thousands of years: from the Stone Age, t 76
- TPO-26 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.Use specific r 76
- TPO-44 - Integrated Writing Task In 1957 a European silver coin dating to the eleventh century was discovered at a Native American archaeological site in the state of Maine in the United States. Many people believed the coin had been originally brought to 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 278, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...any students will there be in that long period of time. Although the school\s enrollments are ...
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Line 7, column 405, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'elucidates'.
Suggestion: elucidates
...ously by applicants, nor does he or she elucidate how the new dormitories can be a truly ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, really, regarding, while, in conclusion, in fact, to begin with, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 58.6224719101 68% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1800.0 2235.4752809 81% => OK
No of words: 339.0 442.535393258 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30973451327 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8423019081 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 215.323595506 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.563421828909 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 541.8 704.065955056 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.740449438202 270% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.3203012364 60.3974514979 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.461538462 118.986275619 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0769230769 23.4991977007 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.30769230769 5.21951772744 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213458973625 0.243740707755 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0786400500727 0.0831039109588 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0820512487673 0.0758088955206 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124922564861 0.150359130593 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0954153507064 0.0667264976115 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 14.1392134831 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 100.480337079 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.