technology effecting individual and society.do you agree?

These days, there is a controversial debate among people about the impacts of modern technologies on individual’s life and the society. There are a great number of individual who interpret impacts of these technologies as thoroughly constructive, while others hold an opponent view. I am inclined to believe that modern technologies are beneficial and should be promoted.

There are several reasons why the state-of-the-art technologies are advantageous. First of all, it argued that high-tech facilities play a pivotal role in creating adroit people. This is attributed to the fact that such technologies could foster the economy and energy efficiency across the globe, therefore, individuals would create a feeling of accomplishment and competence, which consequently open avenues to new achievements so that people’s enthusiasm and determination will be amplified towards many daunting tasks. Innovation of high-speed mobile phones for example, even unprivileged areas could communicate with their families around the world.

In addition, it is claimed that some measures can be taken by governments to stimulate people to sufficient usage of technology. The advent of new technologies has led to changes in young children s creational activities. This could satisfy children of different preferences for entertainment. This is to say that these technologies could be introduced through practical presentation such as seminar and projects, which would instill strong feeling of self-esteem in individuals so that they are more likely to perform up to expectations in society. Specifically, a research study conducted by Yale university in 2015 has found that high-tech technologies could enhance a person’s intellectual ability to make decisions related to social and personal life.

In conclusion, the foregoing discussion propounds the view that state-of-the-art technologies enhance the efficiency and effectiveness of peoples’ evaluation and increases the individual’s confidence. It is expected that governments take cognizance of these facts and begin to adopt this way of training.

Votes
Average: 8 (1 vote)
Essay Categories
PTE_Academic

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 170, Rule ID: A_GREAT_NUMBER_OF_NN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'individuals'?
Suggestion: individuals
...he society. There are a great number of individual who interpret impacts of these technolo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, so, still, therefore, thus, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.5418719212 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 6.10837438424 164% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 8.36945812808 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 5.94088669951 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 24.0 20.9802955665 114% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 31.9359605911 138% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 5.75862068966 208% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1821.0 1207.87684729 151% => OK
No of words: 307.0 242.827586207 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.93159609121 5.00649968141 118% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 3.92707691288 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.58562537851 2.71678728327 132% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 139.433497537 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615635179153 0.580463131201 106% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 379.143842365 148% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.57093596059 115% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.6157635468 173% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.325123152709 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 1.56157635468 192% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.71428571429 58% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.65517241379 55% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6551724138 111% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.5024630542 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 76.4600736146 50.4703680194 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.071428571 104.977214359 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9285714286 20.9669160288 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.07142857143 7.25397266985 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 6.9802955665 172% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 2.75862068966 36% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 2.91625615764 34% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191914154155 0.242375264174 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0632546029363 0.0925447433944 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0586401902093 0.071462118173 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122246934757 0.151781067708 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.04348319794 0.0609392437508 71% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 12.6369458128 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 53.1260098522 63% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 6.54236453202 199% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.9458128079 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.11 11.5310837438 148% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.03 8.32886699507 120% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 55.0591133005 189% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.94827586207 106% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.3980295567 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.5123152709 105% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.5555555556 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 72.5 Out of 90
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